Topic: In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.
why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
With today’s advancements in agriculture, it is increasingly difficult to ignore that many people still keep dying by starvation. This is very controversial issue that people like debating about. There are several reasons and solutions for it.
This is true that the main cause of this problem is the costs. It means that developed agriculture cause higher costs of harvests, so that people who are from developing country cannot intake sufficient nutrition, and it results in starvation. According to WHO statistic shows that Africa infants are dying at each three seconds due to not enough nutritions. Also, the average of Africa GDP is lowest in the world. Therefore, a lot of scientists argue that main problem in starvation is the money,
Even though, this problem is gradually serious due to continuous of developing of farming field, there are several viable solution for it. The best solution to this issue is the volunteerings from the governments and the developed countries. Many Africans don’t have ability to earn money to buy some foods or vitamins, so volunteering from people who have afford to help them can be perfect solution. Actually, there are several campaigns already, such as UNICEF. However, the countries where many people are suffered to hungry do not seems to contribute the concerted efforts. I would recommend that the government have to put their effort to deal with this problem as much as they can.
To sum up. the main reason of starvation from the advanced agriculture is costs are going up, and the best solution to this issue is volunteering from developed countries and the governments which are relating to this problem directly.
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- Topic: In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry.why is this the case? What can be done about this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experien 50
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'afforded'.
Suggestion: afforded
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, second, so, still, therefore, such as, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1419.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 274.0 315.596192385 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17883211679 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0685311056 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83295617405 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 150.0 176.041082164 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.547445255474 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.5952074843 49.4020404114 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.6 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2666666667 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46666666667 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234863960483 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0767087658401 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0555408353516 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155019768392 0.151304729494 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374224168932 0.056905535591 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.0946893788 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.76 12.4159519038 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 78.4519038076 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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