We should introduce laws to make businesses and state services employ equal numbers of male and female workers in every department or area of the company

The issue of equality for men and women at work is still widely debated, despite the
extensive legislation that now exists in many countries. Personally, I do not feel that imposing a
numerical target for gender is a sensible idea, and I will explain why.
Firstly, we have to consider whether equal numbers of men and women really wish to do
every job which is available. For example, few women wish to be airline pilots, and only a minority
of school teachers are male. If we impose a law on airlines or schools, where will they find the
people to fill these posts willingly? Furthermore, there is the huge issue of the existing workforce.
Would it be right to dismiss a worker because he or she is of a certain gender, in order to create a
statistically perfect balance? The effects would be disastrous for many hard-working people. Finally,
I believe we should find ways to encourage equality of opportunity through support and guidance,
rather than top-down legislation. For instance, improved child care facilities and subsidies would
probably encourage more women into parts of the workforce which may currently be difficult to
enter.
I do understand the opposing view, which is that legislation is the quickest and most effective
way to achieve gender equality. Nevertheless, I feel that the disruptive effects of ‘overnight’
legislation would destabilise society and hinder many people’s prospects.
Overall, I believe that equality is an excellent goal for society to strive for. Above all, though,
I think that this needs to be a gradual process, based on careful support rather than sudden legislation.

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
Essays by the user:

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, may, nevertheless, really, so, still, for example, for instance, i feel, i think

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 29.0 41.998997996 69% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1388.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.19850187266 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92087771106 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 176.041082164 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.614232209738 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 432.0 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.1039017066 49.4020404114 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.1428571429 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0714285714 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.71428571429 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 17.0 4.38176352705 388% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0924478047799 0.244688304435 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0303368659212 0.084324248473 36% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0402765075425 0.0667982634062 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0287785825539 0.151304729494 19% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433167157423 0.056905535591 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 13.0946893788 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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