Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as housing and food.
To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Natural disaster has left many people homeless and hungry. I believe rich countries ought to accept and cater for refugees, so as to reduce mortality rate, and help them fulfil their dreams in life.
Survival rate for refugees is very low, because they are exposed to harsh weather conditions and hunger. Since they are impoverished and can not get good housing and food, they die of cold and hunger. To illustrate, internally displaced persons due to war in Somalia have the highest death ratio in that country, primarily, due to hunger and harsh climate. In addition, rehabilitational services can be rendered in the camps to help the depressed out of depression and suicidal thoughts.
Another reason why wealthy nations should take care of them is because, these people have dreams they want to fulfil in life. Being displaced and not able to go about their daily activities will not afford them the opportunity to work towards fulfilling their passions in life. Hence, they need adequate place of abode and nutrition to help motivate and keep their goals alive. John West, for instance, grew up in the American home for displaced persons, and became one of the leading icons in the world of Mathematics. His passion for calculation remained unaffected, because he was cared for.
In conclusion, most homeless people are a product of natural disaster and need shelter and food to survive. I think developed counties can be of tremendous benefit, so as to reduce death rate among them, and help them live out their dreams.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, if, so, as to, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 7.30460921844 14% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1289.0 1615.20841683 80% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03515625 5.12529762239 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59682787544 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61328125 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 399.6 506.74238477 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4411569435 49.4020404114 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 99.1538461538 106.682146367 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.46153846154 7.06120827912 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0847447352197 0.244688304435 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0288136042516 0.084324248473 34% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0315111984927 0.0667982634062 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0544898086487 0.151304729494 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126429751621 0.056905535591 22% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 78.4519038076 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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