As well as making money businesses also have social responsibilities Do you agree or disagree

It is widely acknowledged that financial developments are the top priority of many companies. However, firms are also believed not to lose sight of social responsibilities. From my perspective, I am convinced by this viewpoint.
On the one hand, that most branches should mainly focus on making money is justifiable. It is obvious that businesses which wish to expand with a view to developing their coffers need to pay more taxes. Thanks to this resources, governments can plough them back into civil services such as hospitals, schools,etc. Moreover, firms concentrating on promoting finance can create more chances for the unemployed. When diversifying their financial sources, there will be a need for a workforce, which offers more jobs for ordinary citizens.
On the other hand, adding social benefits to responsibilities is reasonable. In this day and age, it is an unequivocal requirement for businesses to insure no damage to the environment. For instance, recent decades have witnessed global warming caused by emissions from factories. This is a testament to accepting social demands. Furthermore, investments in society are also advisable objectives for corporations to lean towards. Thriving ones ought to put their earnings back into the community through charity programs and scholarships for the disadvantaged. For example, big companies such as Vinamilk and Unilever have made a good impression on the public through their charitable donations.
To sum up, whist I reckon that earning money is the most significant target of numerous firms, I also argue that branches should make allowances for the communal charges.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: these
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, for example, for instance, i reckon, such as, to sum up, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 41.998997996 76% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47035573123 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21098020095 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.652173913043 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 426.6 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.7373266073 49.4020404114 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.5 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8125 20.7667163134 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5 7.06120827912 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143948349677 0.244688304435 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0459565492242 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0442843472517 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0845944856288 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272996376588 0.056905535591 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 50.2224549098 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.15 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.06 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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