As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some people argue that it is necessary for businesses to make profits for their existence. However, I contend that businesses should also be responsible for society where their companies are developing more than simply seeking profit.
On the one hand, the primary purpose of business might create more money with their capacities. This is because they will need money to exist in severe competitive environment If a company cannot make the profit during their operation, it will be no possibility to pay for expenses such as labor, operation and maintenance costs. As a consequence, this company will be bankrupt which could lead to a large number of people face unemployment and become a part of social burdens.
On the other hand, companies should not only concern to maximize their profit, they have a wider role to play in society because it helps their enterprises develop in sustainable way in long-term. Vinamilk perfectly exemplifies for this case. It launched a unique marketing strategy towards beneficial society that each product bought will contribute five thousand dong into the fund in building schools for children in remote areas in Vietnam. It helps to not only encourage consumers to buy their products owing to their community sense, but also increase their products consumed significantly. As a result, this company’s reputation is improved and its brand image is associated with social responsibility. This leads to Vinamilk has become the leading brand during many years which is evaluated by Vietnam consumers.
In conclusion, there is no doubt that financial object plays an important role in business’s existence. However, implementing social responsibility instead of concentrating on making money helps their businesses improve reputation as well as durable development in long time. In my opinion, consumers might favor more community-oriented products that will encourage businesses to create lots of goods serving society more.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 398, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, well, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, as a result, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1664.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 305.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.45573770492 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01294171715 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 176.041082164 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.6 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5658084984 49.4020404114 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.857142857 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7857142857 20.7667163134 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142353440611 0.244688304435 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542449642418 0.084324248473 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0590731330658 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10417028801 0.151304729494 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509750085876 0.056905535591 90% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.4159519038 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.