When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Submitted by motobha on Fri, 08/09/2019 - 08:36

Rise in usage of technology results in a developed country. It is argued that with the commence of technology, old practices and skills fade away and it is futile to try and preserve them. This essay will discuss the ways technology has changed our day to day life and the need to put away with old practices thereby accepting the new ones as a norm.

It is evident from our current surroundings that technology has brought advancement in all aspects of life, be it transportation, education or food. Earlier; before the invention of engines, people used to travel in horse carriages or bullock carts which made it necessary to own such animals. Furthermore, farming was also completely dependent on manual labor again resulting in need of bulls etc. But with the advent of technology, this way of life is dying out as now we have cars, trains for transportation and tractors, combined machines to work on our farms.

Furthermore, there is a huge difference in our way of life at home compared to the earlier days. We do not have to worry about food going bad overnight or too many utensils to wash, all thanks to the invention of refrigerators and dish washers. All the developed countries have 24 hours electricity along with solar power capabilities which in turn helps in keeping our day going on even through the nights without being dependent on the sun.

I do believe that we do not need to keep practicing or living the same life we did before the advancement of technology, but according to me it is a good venture to keep old practices alive in some other ways, like through live museums, books and movies. This will help in educating younger generations about history and need for technological development. It will also make them aware of their roots and ancestors.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 84, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...veloped country. It is argued that with the commence of technology, old practices and skills...
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Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...nd skills fade away and it is futile to try and preserve them. This essay will discuss ...
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Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'ways'' or 'way's'?
Suggestion: ways'; way's
...serve them. This essay will discuss the ways technology has changed our day to day l...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Two successive sentences begin with the same adverb. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...bined machines to work on our farms. Furthermore, there is a huge difference in our way ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 41.998997996 126% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1478.0 1615.20841683 92% => OK
No of words: 309.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78317152104 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1926597562 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80937092833 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.585760517799 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.1560017707 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.692307692 106.682146367 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7692307692 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.30769230769 7.06120827912 33% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204734922034 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0656594916417 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0556388714218 0.0667982634062 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120085600553 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0251035343336 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.0946893788 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 12.4159519038 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 78.4519038076 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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With the advancement in technology, the nations are becoming increasingly developed. There are arguments that technological development leads to vanishing of traditional practices and skills which should be preserved. This essay will discuss about how the commence of technology has changed the lifestyle over time and there is a need to preserve cultural heritage of a country.

The innovation of new computer based world has resulted in diminishing the old cultural schooling patterns, instead people shifted to modern methods of study. In other words, people are attracted more towards recent technologies like live classes on laptop, distance courses from overseas institutes, etc., earlier they were stuck to traditional knowledge only. Moreover, there are numerous of electrical gadgets available in the market replaced for humans to perform various skill activities. This leads to altering of lifestyle as compared to old days.

The early people used to travel through horses or bullocks but invention of automobiles has improved the transportation facilities. Nowadays, people prefer travelling through air or rail to safe time and do not want to practice traditional ways of transport.this has lead to evaporation of nation's heritage. As a consequence, the young generation is far away from their culture and involved more in latest technological world.

In conclusion, although advent of technology is important to be a developed nation, the cultural background should remain alive through museums, books and movies.