Write a narrative essay about someone or something that influenced you

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Write a narrative essay about someone or something that influenced you.

When I was a child I lived in Soc Trang province, but since I was 5 years old, my parents decided to move to Can Tho to live and until now Can Tho is my present hometown. I will never forget that moment of moving house, because at that time I thought that moving to a completely unfamiliar place would not be interesting for me. I was very sad and I didn't want to move.

           Words can hardly describe how sad I felt at the thought or having to move to Can Tho. As a child of only 5 years old, I didn't fully understand the purpose of parents moving away. My parents often told me that they moved to CanTho to facilitate my family's business. But with my stubborn temper, I shouted loudly" I don't want to move, I just want to stay here" , then my parents were very upset. But everything had been decided and I had no choice but to move to Can Tho with my parents.

          Soon after moving to Can Tho,however, I felt happy with this new place. I started to make many friends when I went to a new school. At that time ,I walked to school with my friends on a rather slippery road everyday. Sometimes we didn't have time to go to school but we had to go back home to change our clothes because the road was so slippery that we fell and then our clothes were dirty. I still haven't forgotten that road, although we fell quite painfully, but we enjoyed it because we didn't have to go to school on days when our clothes were dirty.

           Today, I am older and I am a university student, I am aware that moving to Can Tho to live is not a personal decision of my parents. But one that can help me have a happy life.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...very sad and I didnt want to move.            Words can hardly describe how sad I felt...
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... to move, I just want to stay here' , then my parents were very upset. But ev...
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... to move to Can Tho with my parents.           Soon after moving to Can Tho,however, I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, still, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.3376753507 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1332.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.03636363636 5.12529762239 79% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32788033273 2.80592935109 83% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 176.041082164 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.0 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.60771543086 81% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1598107886 49.4020404114 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.8 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.2 7.06120827912 31% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.01903807615 259% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.244688304435 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.084324248473 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0667982634062 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.151304729494 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.056905535591 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 13.0946893788 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 74.53 50.2224549098 148% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 11.3001002004 73% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.15 12.4159519038 50% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.55 8.58950901804 76% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 78.4519038076 48% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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