Write a narrative essay about someone that influenced you
Many people have affected my life. Since I was in college, it is normal to have an active and influential person in my life. Aside from my parents, there are others who continue to have a significant effect on my life; one of them is Lane. Because my life was not that beautiful, I learn a lot from her. Lane is also a significant person in my life.
Even though it's been 3 years but I still remember how we met. Despite that we had only exchanged a few texts, I helped her in purchasing a bus ticket to the Hoa An military. She and I had never met, but I was pleased with her during that discussion because of her polite and cheerful messages. Until I met her at the university where we both studied, and we've been friends ever since. She made me surprise because she was so adorable.
Since then she has always been my friend. When I'm in trouble, she always helps me. One day, there was a time of great stress after exams when she was the one who gave me the best, she helps me forget all the bad things I heard before and especially she really believes me about everything. She is always fun and she gives that inspiration to spread that energy across people. She is a small person but she is always full of positive energy.
She influences my life a lot. She has always been a source of inspiration for me. She is also my most important mentor. She encouraged and pushed me to become a decent human being, overcome obstacles in life, achieve success, and most importantly, I fell so happily in life at various phases of my life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...urprise because she was so adorable. Since then she has always been my friend. Whe...
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...hen she has always been my friend. When Im in trouble, she always helps me. One d...
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...y friend. When Im in trouble, she always helps me. One day, there was a time of g...
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...e is always full of positive energy. She influences my life a lot. She has alway...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, really, so, still, then
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 13.1623246493 144% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 7.85571142285 0% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1256.0 1615.20841683 78% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.33103448276 5.12529762239 85% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4082695422 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 161.0 176.041082164 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.555172413793 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 411.3 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.2975951904 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.0496626742 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.1052631579 106.682146367 62% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.2631578947 20.7667163134 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 7.06120827912 28% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0144815197744 0.244688304435 6% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0064363118358 0.084324248473 8% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0215007191004 0.0667982634062 32% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00954380360054 0.151304729494 6% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00990584805545 0.056905535591 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 6.6 13.0946893788 50% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 73.17 50.2224549098 146% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 11.3001002004 60% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 7.24 12.4159519038 58% => Coleman_liau_index is low.
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.21 8.58950901804 84% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 78.4519038076 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.1190380762 79% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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