Writing task 2: Art is considered an important part of a society as well as an expression of its culture. Do you think it is important for children to be taught art? Do you think children should be encouraged to focus on art rather than other subjects?
Undoubtedly, art plays a crucial role in terms of both preservation of historically cultural heritages and development of human creativity. Personally, I completely agree with the view that children should be trained in art and if art is their aptitude, their parents should support children to pursue subjects related to art such as drawing and music.
On the one hand, there are a number of researches that illustrate the benefits of art on our kids. When a child learns drawing, it helps her to have freedom to express herself and to boost her creativity. Besides, it is plain that pupils get a lot of enjoyment from listening to music whose melody and rhyme can help our kids unwind after learning boring things associated with calculations. In addition, some branches of art such as traditional music, for example, Hue royal Court Music is considered as an official major at Hue Academy of Music and thus help us conserve cultural values.
On the other hand, it is known that students can learn about other subjects such as history, languages through vivid pictures, and vice versa. My youngest sister, who has memorized a wider range of English vocabulary effectively via music and imaging, is a typical case. Moreover, some individuals are gifted with artistic skills and passionate about art subjects. And hence, if children are encouraged, they will have more definite direction in their future career and even can become one of the talents who create spiritual values alongside bringing lucrative income.
To conclude, it is a fact that the importance of art in our life is undeniable especially with children. Art subjects should be given equal attention to science and social studies and need to be invested reasonably.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to draw'.
Suggestion: to draw
...of art on our kids. When a child learns drawing, it helps her to have freedom to expres...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 348, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to bore'.
Suggestion: to bore
...can help our kids unwind after learning boring things associated with calculations. In...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07342657343 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77375883597 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622377622378 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9135921229 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.916666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254952527008 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866577888807 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777785325295 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167833671898 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884949938396 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 119, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to draw'.
Suggestion: to draw
...of art on our kids. When a child learns drawing, it helps her to have freedom to expres...
^^^^^^^
Line 2, column 348, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to bore'.
Suggestion: to bore
...can help our kids unwind after learning boring things associated with calculations. In...
^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, hence, if, moreover, so, thus, for example, in addition, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1451.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 286.0 315.596192385 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07342657343 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11236361783 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77375883597 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622377622378 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 458.1 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9135921229 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.916666667 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8333333333 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.66666666667 7.06120827912 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254952527008 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866577888807 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777785325295 0.0667982634062 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167833671898 0.151304729494 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0884949938396 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 13.0946893788 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.