You have visited another city in your country.
Prior to the visit you requested some information from a tourist centre,
but the information was incorrect. Write a letter to the manager of the centre and say
- What information were you looking for?
- What was incorrect in it?
- What happened to you because of it.
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with the services provided by your tourist centre. Recently, I visited it to gather some information about Sydney, regarding places to visit and accommodation. Allow me to explain what happened.
Although the staff member was helpful, he provided me some incorrect information. Firstly, I had a plan to visit world famous amusement park, he told me that is open on all days. But when I reached there on Sunday, to my disappointment I found that it was closed. If I had correct information, I would have gone on some other day.
In addition to that , he suggested a hotel near Darling Harbor with an excellent view. As soon as, I reached the hotel I realized that it was nowhere in vicinity if the harbor and located between the high rise building.
Due to all this issues, I faced lot of inconvenience. This effectively ruined my vacation. As a result ,I was not able to see the park and struggled a lot to find a hotel with nice view.
I hope you will do the needful and improve the services of tourist centre.
Yours Faithfully
Allan
if the harbor and located between the high rise building.
Description: can you re-write this sentence?
I faced lot of inconvenience.
I faced a lot of inconvenience.
he told me that is open on all days
he told me that it is open on all days
I would have gone on some other day.
I would have gone on some other days.
Sentence: Due to all this issues, I faced lot of inconvenience.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to this and issues
you will do the needful
Description: 'needful' is not a noun
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 195 350
No. of Characters: 869 1500
No. of Different Words: 124 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.737 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.456 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.755 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 58 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 44 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 27 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 15 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 13 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.45 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.467 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.322 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.114 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5