You should spend about 40 minutes on this task Write about the following topic The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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The personal information of many individuals is held by large internet companies and organizations.
Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

There have been growing concerns regarding the fact that the private information of many individuals is being stored by large technology corporations such as Facebook or Tiktok. Personally, although storing personal data can be beneficial to both the users and the company, this comes at the cost of internet privacy and security, and the disadvantages outweigh the advantages in the long run.

The acquisition of personal data by large companies enables them to understand their users better. With the help of machine learning, information can be analyzed to help a company provide better services and customize its products to meet different customers' needs. Facebook, for instance, is known for using its users’ search history to show advertisements according to their interests. For the users, this is particularly helpful as the products they wish to buy appear right in front of their eyes, effectively increasing profits for sellers and enhancing satisfaction for buyers.

Nevertheless, in most cases, private information is collected without the user's consent, meaning it is near impossible for them to know what their data is being used for, which results in significant advantages. First of all, because companies are capable of selling their users’ databases to advertising agencies who can bombard the user with several advertisements regardless of platforms, the users’ comfort is compromised. It was not long ago when Facebook (the most popular social media up-to-date) was sued for violating consumer privacy laws by sharing personal data of users with third parties. Another risk that individuals face when having their data stored is that hackers may use the data they steal to blackmail and scam money. In some cases, banking information can be used to withdraw money illegally from the owners’ accounts.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, nevertheless, regarding, so, third, for instance, such as, first of all, in most cases, in some cases

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 285.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.45263157895 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10876417139 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91094029606 2.80592935109 104% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.610526315789 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 474.3 506.74238477 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 42.0118047165 49.4020404114 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.272727273 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.9090909091 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.6363636364 7.06120827912 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.100572900428 0.244688304435 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0441738958887 0.084324248473 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0420878821322 0.0667982634062 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0878931278655 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.057428305475 0.056905535591 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.63 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.58950901804 113% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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