You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
The young today spend a large amount of their leisure time in shopping centres. It is feared that this could have a negative influence on the young and society.
To what extend do you agree or disagree with this view?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
You should write at least 250 words.
It is argued that it would be adversely detrimental for the young and social field if the youngster spends a great of their past time in shopping small. I think this trend could have both positive and negative influences in equal measure, as now will be discussed.
Going shopping or spending leisure time in commercial centres can be seen as beneficial for several reasons. Firstly, by buying new things, people can reduce stress effectively. In fact, according to many research, the feeling of possessing what we want to make us feel rewarding and relaxing, therefore it could be considered as a useful hobby to experience in our free time. Secondly, the relationships between people would be strengthened if we go shopping with our friends or families. In need, while do shopping, people can hang out and have happy conversations with beloved ones, which help us understand our surrounding people and help to maintain social relations.
Despite the good impacts mentioned above, I believe that if the youngsters advocate too much time on shopping places, this would be also a disadvantageous development to some extend. The main drawback is its cots because, in order to pursue this activity, people have to spend a considerable amount of money. For example, some young people become shopping additions, they are willing to burn their money to buy new launch products to catch up with the updated trend despite the demand of using them or not. Another downside of this trend is that lead person to become passive. In other words, there are various leisure activities, which are more active and healthy to take part in such as playing sport or join in social events rather than being in shopping centres.
In conclusion, in spite of some positive impacts on improving stress situation or maintain close-knit relationships, I hold the opinion that spending too much time on shopping also triggers adverse effects.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...f the youngster spends a great of their past time in shopping small. I think this trend c...
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Line 3, column 201, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun research seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much research', 'a good deal of research'.
Suggestion: much research; a good deal of research
...ress effectively. In fact, according to many research, the feeling of possessing what we want...
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Line 5, column 176, Rule ID: SOME_EXTEND[1]
Message: Did you mean 'extent' ("extent" is a noun, "extend" is a verb)?
Suggestion: extent
...o a disadvantageous development to some extend. The main drawback is its cots because,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in other words, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1607.0 1615.20841683 99% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06940063091 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76964422922 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.602523659306 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 485.1 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.7661958654 49.4020404114 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.615384615 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.8461538462 7.06120827912 168% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218941558206 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776294621687 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0509527788179 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136449070772 0.151304729494 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0584742163422 0.056905535591 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.4159519038 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 78.4519038076 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.