The youths should allocate time for cultural activities such as music and theatre rather than for sports
Nowadays, there is the statement that the youths should allocate time for cultural activities such as music and theatre rather than for sports. While some people argue that it is the best way to improve children's abilities to cope with realistic problems, others believe that children should spend time equal to both aspects. From my perspective, I partially agree with the statement as sports seem to be indispensable in our lives.
First of all, it is clear that spending more time on cultural activities would bring several mental benefits to people participating. For example, it can enable youngsters to get into harmony with society and one's environment or give opportunities to enhance life skills and board art feeling abilities. Moreover, taking part in cultural activities also help adolescents to learn about their family customs, traditions through their history behind these activities. However, if we ignore the importance of doing exercises and enrolling to sports to rise the time spending for the cultural aspect, it would be lead to many disasters to our health. For instance, lacking sports activities can lead to health-related illnesses such as obesity. Furthermore, a sedentary lifestyle can also result in heart attack disease and many extremely dangerous heart problems. So, if we neglect to do physical training, the consequences, therefore, would be very considerable.
In conclusion, while cultural activities act as an imperative role in one's growing span, we should also concentrate on building physical health at the same time.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1324.0 1615.20841683 82% => OK
No of words: 244.0 315.596192385 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4262295082 5.12529762239 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.95227774224 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94715163642 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.647540983607 0.561755894193 115% => OK
syllable_count: 412.2 506.74238477 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 30.9643890369 49.4020404114 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.363636364 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1818181818 20.7667163134 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.1818181818 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406108872565 0.244688304435 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147758913711 0.084324248473 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.215166218498 0.0667982634062 322% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257752778859 0.151304729494 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.135479243123 0.056905535591 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 50.2224549098 81% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 11.3001002004 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.21 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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