adults today do not do enough exercise some people believe that showing events like Olympic and World Cup can encourage adults to exercise while others say that there are many more ways to encourage them Discuss both views and give your opinion

Today's adults are doing less workout activity. Individual thinking are there for motivations ways like if by watching the sports events of matches on television make people to encourage towards exercise. And the other view is there are other better means to motivate younger people for exercise.

Television have more impact on people as they watch them when they get their free time.and nowadays adults love to watch their favorite games on television. Sports like football , cricket, basketball, tennis, etc. They get involved them selves while watching. It may a person get motivated by their favorite sports person. And can get imress by their personalities. It may lead them for their care for personal fitness. It is necessary in this time of the busy work schedule a person should manage their time for exercise. Cause due to technology inventions people become lazy and getting less involvement in physical tasks specially younger one. Due to that health issues are arriving more and more. If atleast by seeing their idols to performing to their goals adults may get motivate themselves.

In the contradictory second view stat that there are more things to attract them for doing exercise. Nowadays adults are being less social due to their life style and that directly connect them with their fitness level. If people get more into the socializing groups where such events organise like group of friends play cricket in every weekends by this kind of activities they engcourage for work out. And even at work places if employers organize events like football or other camps ,matches for self awareness of the employees for their health. It is beneficial for both ways to connect and have better relationships in the company.

So in my opinion I completely agree with second view it has more power than previous case cause it is better for the individual development in healthcare rather than just watching matches on t.v. .
By being social is more impact full.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, second, so, while, kind of, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 34.0 24.0651302605 141% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1655.0 1615.20841683 102% => OK
No of words: 326.0 315.596192385 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07668711656 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53812211599 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.533742331288 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 509.4 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0721442886 124% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.869699201 49.4020404114 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.75 106.682146367 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.3 20.7667163134 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.5 7.06120827912 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 23.0 5.01903807615 458% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181895098196 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0633303331309 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475352849032 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10846276111 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715810218056 0.056905535591 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 13.0946893788 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.89 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.58950901804 94% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 78.4519038076 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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