Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries many small local business are unable to compete Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities To what extent do you agr

It is true that the number of malls and giant supermarkets are growing remarkably which leads to domestic business collapsing. while there are countless benefits in this trend, many believed that it makes local communities in a danger. In my opinion, local business and communities have direct relationship which decline in one of them affects on another one.

There are several reasons which prove that in order to preserve local society, keeping the local stores and shops alive is a must. Firstly, decreasing the number of local stores leads to decreasing neighbors 's communication and gradually their mutual activities will be missed as a result. Secondly, employers and entrepreneurs tend to immigrate to another location where has a great potential to lunch their new business. Finally, rate of the unemployment would face an increasing number and youngsters needs to relocate to land a well-paid job.
Moreover, it is common knowledge that any shopping or store always struggle to promote culture of their territory by supplying merchandise which are producing by people who are living in neighborhood. In other word, they are a source of income or their communities and encourage people to conserve traditional and cultures by distributing domestic products. For example, about 5 years ago a popular chain market opened a branch in a green village which is located in north of Iran and was famous for its delicious hand-made honey. After a while local honey producers could not keep their business as they lost their customers due to vast chain market ‘s advertisement and tourists showed their tendency to buy from modern supermarket.
In conclusion, although, advancement in supermarket ‘s industry brought considerable opportunities, I believe supporting local business is essential to not to lose our local community.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 128, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: While
... leads to domestic business collapsing. while there are countless benefits in this tr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, firstly, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1551.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 290.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34827586207 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12666770723 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00025563715 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.634482758621 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.4866594326 49.4020404114 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.25 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1666666667 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.75 7.06120827912 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22085583438 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794536063659 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0623663788477 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146926027054 0.151304729494 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497076122641 0.056905535591 87% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 50.2224549098 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 11.3001002004 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.4159519038 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.62 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 78.4519038076 112% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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