Excessive consumption of sugar causes many health related issues. Some people believe the government should control population’s sugar intake while others think people themselves should be responsible for their sugar eating habits. Discuss both views an

Nowadays people realize that sugar is a harmful substance for their bodies. Many disease such as diabetes due to consume sugar in diet. Some people tend to think the government should control sugar consuming. In contrast, some people believe that they should be aware of using sugar in their daily routines. However, there are both pros and cons to deciding do this. In this essay, the advantages and disadvantages about this issue will be discussed.
It is certainly obvious, people especially the elderly, should take care of themselves and have a plan for their diet because there is nobody better than themselves and can be aware of their conditions. A recent study published by Stanford University indicates more than 78 percent of people over 65 who has special diet and eliminate sugar from their life, can be alive in healthy situation and face with less disease than others. Hence, we should decide to eliminate sugar in our diet by ourselves.
Turning to the other part of the argument, take care of the citizens is one of the duties of the governments and they should consider some associations to service the people. For example, in developed countries such as the UK, there is an association for diabetes and people can refer there for their annual checkup and they give special diet to the people.
All in all, in spite of people should be careful about their body’s conditions, the governments are responsible for their citizens and should consider amenities for them. Personally, I prefer to checkup my body annually and by doctor consulting use a suitable diet in my routines.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun disease seems to be countable; consider using: 'Many diseases'.
Suggestion: Many diseases
...s a harmful substance for their bodies. Many disease such as diabetes due to consume sugar i...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, so, for example, in contrast, such as, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 41.998997996 81% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1335.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96282527881 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63010561298 2.80592935109 94% => OK
Unique words: 145.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539033457249 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 423.0 506.74238477 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.6412218444 49.4020404114 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.692307692 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6923076923 20.7667163134 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.38461538462 7.06120827912 76% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.392044391682 0.244688304435 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.152543709891 0.084324248473 181% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111715248669 0.0667982634062 167% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.234044892372 0.151304729494 155% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0939309610313 0.056905535591 165% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.21 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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