Despite their success, many famous actors and musicians are considered to live unhappily. In my opinion, this is true in the majority of the cases since the price of being a star is heavy and outweighs the status achieved. In fact, a considerable number of show business industry’s members suffer of mental issues.
Nowadays, glamorous celebrities have the reputation of living in an exciting way. For example, most of them experience vacations in exotic and amazing places with no expense spared. Evidently, whoever has gained popularity, wealth and admiration might be envied by many people, because he has obtained what everyone desires. To name just a few, beautiful cars and houses, all goods that money and success can buy.
However, being a star has its own drawbacks and celebrities reveal to be victim of their own success. Firstly, they are more exposed than anyonelse, just think the lack of privacy due to the existence of gossip magazines. Furthermore, celebrities are well know for be drug or alcohol addicted and this abuse has dramatically driven some of them to death. Moreover, there is an increase in number of suicides among stars which is terribly shocking. Their self-destructive behaviour may be caused by a sense of feeling rejection, which is an emotion experienced by every human being. Once they get the peak, the fear of loosing the love from the audience comes, leading to several mental illness such as depression and anxiety.
To conclude, I think that the common proverb 'money cannot buy happiness' is surely true and the miserable lives of stars are a prove that our convictions on the link between material goods and happiness are an illusion.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 63, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in an exciting way" with adverb for "exciting"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...lebrities have the reputation of living in an exciting way. For example, most of them experience v...
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Line 5, column 257, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...ines. Furthermore, celebrities are well know for be drug or alcohol addicted and thi...
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Line 5, column 619, Rule ID: LOOSING_EFFORTRECORDSEASON[1]
Message: Did you mean 'losing the'?
Suggestion: losing the
...ng. Once they get the peak, the fear of loosing the love from the audience comes, leading t...
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Line 7, column 125, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ue and the miserable lives of stars are a prove that our convictions on the link betwee...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, i think, in fact, such as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 1615.20841683 87% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.08273381295 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79810106998 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.654676258993 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.565598682 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.928571429 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8571428571 20.7667163134 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224204491379 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0631592282826 0.084324248473 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0364635735864 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.114583943182 0.151304729494 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347496844998 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 13.0946893788 95% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 50.2224549098 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 12.4159519038 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.41 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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