Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives.
Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?
Nowadays, everyone would like to be a renown, most of youngest people are searching for famous and fast to richness. The most famous people are enjoying a very expensive lifestyle. Despite that, they are facing many of unpleasant events as they are always unsafe. I do agree that everything in the world has a price as well as the celebrities, they pay from their expenses for that kind of life.
Film stars and music celebrities are generally richer than most regular individuals, they earn a very food income from acting or singing a music even after sign a new contract. In fact, most celebrities afford extravagant houses, fancy sport cars and gorgeous clothes. Moreover, when people being a famous more opportunities arise on their life, for example, Ahmed Helmy is an actor and after a significant effort in his career, he has appointed as a nation ambassador by United Nations children’s fund (UNICEF).
On the other hand, there are also a lot of drawbacks from being famous. Film and music celebrities usually vulnerable to addicted drags or alcohol or being poor after their career has ended and they spent most of their money by travelling around the world and buy unnecessary stuff. Although, they have no privacy with a high-risk lifestyle, they always chased by paparazzi wherever they go. Instance, sometimes it is difficult to them to make a simple trip to a grocery store without their security guard.
In conclusion, there are money advantages and disadvantages of the fame, but in my opinion, you do not have to be famous to make a huge personal achievement or financial success.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 52, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the youngest'.
Suggestion: of the youngest
...veryone would like to be a renown, most of youngest people are searching for famous and fas...
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Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sonal achievement or financial success.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in fact, kind of, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1346.0 1615.20841683 83% => OK
No of words: 270.0 315.596192385 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98518518519 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77969316679 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 168.0 176.041082164 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.622222222222 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 428.4 506.74238477 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.4914908392 49.4020404114 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.166666667 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5 20.7667163134 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.4166666667 7.06120827912 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.259484143263 0.244688304435 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0855803771224 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0456346708902 0.0667982634062 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148237440589 0.151304729494 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0234006328315 0.056905535591 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 50.2224549098 98% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.96 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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