The government should lower the budget on the arts in order to allocate more money to education.
To what extent do you agree?
It has been argued that the money dedicated to the arts should be decreased by the authority to spend more money on education. In the forthcoming paragraphs, I will elaborate on why I strongly agree with this statement.
Firstly, by devoting money to education, the governments might encourage deprived people to increase their academic knowledge. Nowadays, the request for admitting to state universities is soaring, and their capacity is limited. Therefore, a large number of students pour into private ones. However, because of the very staggering tuition fee of these colleges, many eager students cannot afford it and deprive of further education. If this money is spent on students’ scholarships or building more state graduate schools, more children are able to register in these free universities.
In addition, the online educational infrastructure will be fortified if this money uses appropriately. Plenty of students, especially those living in remote areas in third-world countries, do not have convenient access to schools or teachers, leading to an increase in the rate of illiterate individuals. Allocating this money to construct an appropriate infrastructure to increase internet access will facilitate their education. It can bring the teachers and books to their smart devices, and they have a partially equal opportunity to learn.
Although some people consider the arts as entertainment and believe they would be crucial for developing children’s mind, the high budget spent on them is not reasonable.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that if more money is devoted to education, more students and children will get benefit from it.
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'admitting stating'.
Suggestion: admitting stating
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, however, if, so, therefore, third, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 7.30460921844 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1418.0 1615.20841683 88% => OK
No of words: 256.0 315.596192385 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5390625 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12734287175 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.61328125 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.6044427151 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.076923077 106.682146367 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6923076923 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.92307692308 7.06120827912 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187928637234 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603807545432 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056872828306 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.102780239383 0.151304729494 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044473886807 0.056905535591 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.85 12.4159519038 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.57 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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