It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Some argue that the state should spend money on promoting healthy lifestyles to prevent disease is more important than spending on remedies of ill patients. In my opinion, spending money on promoting a healthy lifestyles and treating sick people should be balanced and equally important
There are several reasons why the promotion of healthy lifestyles needs government funding. Firstly, this funding can help address the problems of negative lifestyles in modern society and causes a series of debilitating diseases that are on the rise. For example, it is often due to lack of exercise and a high cholesterol diet. These common health problems can be prevented by promoting healthy on media such as newspaper, TV shows, education through youtube videos and public campaigns to raise awareness among the public to people about the high danger of unhealthy food causing and directly affecting cosumer’s health. Secondly, many diseases today still cannot be cured by medical methods, although machinery, medical equipment and medical knowledge are increasingly improved and developed.Such as cancer, this disease cannot be completely cured even after a long courrses of painful treatment and even cost a lot of money , also effort but it is a pity that many of these cancers can be cured denied by a healthy lifestyle.
On the other hand, spending a reasonable proportion of public money to treat sick people is no less important than using money to propagate. It is a fact that some diseases are inherited through generations. In other words, they are passed down from parent to child in genes and cannot be prevented or altered by any means. For example, a child whose previous generations have had diabetes is more likely to develop this genetic disorder and it is almost impossible not to have the disease in adulthood. In these cases, neither a healthy lifestyle nor a good diet can guarantee a clean health, thus highlighting its role. Moreover, the cost of medical care and medicine is increasing, especially for people with genetic fatal diseases. In these cases, it can threaten to place a great deal of financial burden on the patient, who will need financial support from the state to alleviate this problem.
In my view, although the previous investment plays a very important role, I believe it means nothing more than the patient’s recovery. In conclusion, it is certainly true that the government should invest money in the promotion of a healthy lifestyle among all citizens, but this is by no means the public budget should be only distributed since, in many circumstances, costly treatment of the ill cannot be neglected which is difficult and expensive.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, thus, for example, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, in my view, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 13.1623246493 182% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 7.85571142285 191% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 41.998997996 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2244.0 1615.20841683 139% => OK
No of words: 437.0 315.596192385 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.13501144165 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.20363070211 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79397956384 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.526315789474 0.561755894193 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 705.6 506.74238477 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 20.2975951904 143% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 91.5005768045 49.4020404114 185% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.6 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1333333333 20.7667163134 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.5333333333 7.06120827912 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.9879759519 226% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279729248043 0.244688304435 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0946508144225 0.084324248473 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.115968765249 0.0667982634062 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208251697036 0.151304729494 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129994830233 0.056905535591 228% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 13.0946893788 132% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 50.2224549098 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 12.4159519038 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.94 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 78.4519038076 136% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.1190380762 134% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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