Model role play an important role in development of a chid. But nowadays, many violent behaviours appear on tv and do harm to the mind of children. This essay will discuss how the issue is cause as well as measures can be taken to deal with this problem.
There are several reasons for the the growth in the criminal rate relate to media. Firstly, bully and stimulating scenes on tv have negative effect on childen because they form an ill mannered character of hero in their mind. They claim that agood man have to know how to fight and defeat the people who do much harm to them..Secondly, unhealthy shows on tv is a casual agency of hyperactivity disorder on the youth. When they see them on tv, they wil do the expession of them. In some case, they can not control their mind, and thus they desperately keep hitting on a defendant and cause serious pains on them.as a result, the rate of juvenile delinquency inclrase more and more.
Because of the danger of this trend, collaboration between family and authorities is necessary to reduce thir problem. Parental guidence can contribute to discoraging this by some actions like commenting and criticizing the bad behaviours when they appear on tv or anywhere children can see them. In addition to family, authorities can organize more sport clubs and provide incentives to them to encourage them to take part in those clubs.
In conclustion, there are various causes as well as methods relating to this trend. In my opinion, On the top of that, individuals should be aware of this disadvantages to avoid and not to follow them.
Model role play an important role in development of a chid. But nowadays, many violent behaviours appear on tv and do harm to the mind of children. Thus, This essay will discuss how the issue is cause as well as measures can be taken to deal with this problem.
There are several reasons for the the growth in the criminal rate relate to media. Firstly, bully and stimulating scenes on tv have negative effect on childen because they form an ill mannered character of hero in their mind. They claim that agood man have to know how to fight and defeat the people who do much harm to them. Secondly, unhealthy shows on tv is a casual agency of hyperactivity disorder on the youth. Moreover, when they see them on tv, they wil do the expession of them. In some case, they can not control their mind, and thus they desperately keep hitting on a defendant and cause serious pains on them.as a result, the rate of juvenile delinquency inclrase more and more.
Because of the danger of this trend, collaboration between family and authorities is necessary to reduce thir problem. Firstly, Parental guidence can contribute to discoraging this by some actions like commenting and criticizing the bad behaviours when they appear on tv or anywhere children can see them. In addition to family, authorities can organize more sport clubs and provide incentives to them to encourage them to take part in those clubs.
In conclustion, there are various causes as well as methods relating to this trend. In my opinion, On the top of that, individuals should be aware of this disadvantages to avoid and not to follow them.
- Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less and less time with their parents.What is the reason for this?What problems can this cause? 77
- Modern technology is now very common in many work places.How do you think this has changed the way we worked?Do you think there are disadvantages to reply too much on technology? 11
- Modern technology is now very common in many work places.How do you think this has changed the way we worked?Do you think there are disadvantages to reply too much on technology? 89
- It is often thought that the increase in juvenile crime can be attributed to violence in the media.What do you think is the reason for the growth in the rate of juvenile crime?What solutions can you offer to deal with this situation 78
- Most modern families have both parents working and as a result children spend less and less time with their parents.What is the reason for this?What problems can this cause? 72
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, moreover, second, secondly, so, thus, well, in addition, as a result, as well as, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 7.85571142285 178% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 10.4138276553 230% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 92.0 41.998997996 219% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2643.0 1615.20841683 164% => OK
No of words: 556.0 315.596192385 176% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.7535971223 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85588840946 4.20363070211 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68414930602 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 166.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.298561151079 0.561755894193 53% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 829.8 506.74238477 164% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.10420841683 285% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.76152304609 252% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 16.0721442886 168% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.509455321 49.4020404114 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8888888889 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5925925926 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.2962962963 7.06120827912 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 8.0 4.38176352705 183% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 16.0 5.01903807615 319% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 19.0 3.9879759519 476% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145984701718 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529776755745 0.084324248473 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.054556923848 0.0667982634062 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0873167619288 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0226334388001 0.056905535591 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 11.3001002004 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 12.4159519038 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.67 8.58950901804 78% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 78.4519038076 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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