Is it right for the Japanese Mako Princess who gave up royal status to marry Give both view opinion

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Is it right for the Japanese Mako Princess who gave up royal status to marry? Give both view opinion?

All over the world, royal activities always draw surging attention from the public. The recent event about the Japanese Mako Princess’s marriage has raised a strong debate on whether the decision to give up the royal family is a plausible step for her marriage as well as her life. From my standpoint, I will support the good side of the Princess’ action by discussing both sides of the issue.
On the one hand, deciding to marry, Make Princess will give up her royal status and privilege. In fact, as the royal family member, the Princess has no concern about her livelihood which is supported by a national fund for the royal family and also holds a special right to enter many political and social activities, which can help her gain more reputation and social recognition. Moreover, Mako and her husband have confirmed that they will leave their home nation to settle in New York, America where her husband has offered a job as a lawyer. It means that the Princess is standing in a hard position of leaving her beloved family members, starting a new life in a strange place, and facing strong opposition from the public.
On the other hand, the decision to follow her heart will lead her to a life of liberty, happiness. In other words, by retreating from royal activities, Mako can do whatever she wants, lives with who she loves, and pursue what she dreams about. Without the restriction from the royal position, she can live a normal life and are free to develop herself in any field, which appears to be a fundamental right for human. In her past, the Princess’s life involves lots of formal events, meetings, social activities and inhibits her from enjoying casual activities such as meeting friends in casual places, eating out, attending parties, etc.
In conclusion, the royal position brings lots of money and power toward Mako’s life but the positive positive effects of leaving it outweigh all of that privilege. Eventually, living one’s real life is more important than any ephemeral possession.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as well as, in other words, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1683.0 1615.20841683 104% => OK
No of words: 344.0 315.596192385 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89244186047 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56038319948 2.80592935109 91% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55523255814 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 513.0 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.76152304609 189% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.9022845509 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.461538462 106.682146367 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.69230769231 7.06120827912 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203524493817 0.244688304435 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.073978834621 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0683224299433 0.0667982634062 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12497298217 0.151304729494 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0620052125154 0.056905535591 109% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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