A large number of people think that nowadays women should not work hard to earn their living they should spend more time in caring for their families To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

Controversy exists when several people reckon choosing job-oriented courses is mandatory for an adolescent who enrolls in a university. From my perspective, i am not in favor of this opinion and I suppose that every student should have the freedom to choose his major.

There are various reasons why people believe that subjects that will be useful in the future should only be offered by educational institution . Recently, with the increasing importance of science as well as the more materialistic lifestyle, technology has gained enormous popularity when not only does it help students get an all-round understanding of the world around them but it also opens brighter doors to future careers. An IT staff, for example, can be on the average salary of 10-25 million VND per month, which is abundant for them to depend on for their livelihood. However, it is tragic that technology works merely create higher paying jobs and attract only high educated individuals who are frequently from top universities. Therefore, with a view to establishing himself in the job-market easily and getting a higher remuneration, an undergraduate need to gain in-depth knowledge of scientific subjects . For that rationale, multiple parents force their offspring to bone up on these academic subjects.

Notwithstanding, this restriction may lead to the society’s disequilibrium in the future. If people merely put their emphasis on science course, other occupations may lose their potential workforce, which in turn have a detrimental bearing on the nations' economy. For instance, there are countries which have plentiful workforce in medicine and engineering, yet need to fork out extravagant money to hire workers for their smooth functioning. Studying the subjects, which learners are interested in, also leads them to more success as students taking part in the activities which they have been dreaming of serves as an incentive to work with a great zeal . Last but not least, the beneficial impacts of non-academic should not be overlooked when physical education classes will give pupils respite from stressful periods of mental activities in other lessons. This will boost their level of concentration and understanding when they get back to the classroom.

In conclusion, it is irrational to impose the subject restriction on learners whatever the circumstance may be. The youth has an eligibility to pursue the domain they long.

Votes
Average: 8.9 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i suppose, in conclusion, as well as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 7.30460921844 219% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 31.0 24.0651302605 129% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 52.0 41.998997996 124% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2051.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 381.0 315.596192385 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38320209974 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0805684658 2.80592935109 110% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 176.041082164 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.608923884514 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 631.8 506.74238477 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3970972994 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.1875 106.682146367 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8125 20.7667163134 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.4375 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184224769608 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0572349704625 0.084324248473 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0328747451472 0.0667982634062 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992143534255 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0509504639037 0.056905535591 90% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.22 12.4159519038 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.