Many people believe that schools should teach children to become good citizens and workers rather than independent individuals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion and relevant examples.

Children are future of any country therefore he they might be grown up i
Has become a debatable issue.one school of thought said that educational institute should give them only moral education whilst other believe that they should taught to be self dependent.I personally partially agree with the statement.

Teaching children to be a responsible natives are need of hour because in today's cut and throat competition parents are busy in spinning money consequently children suffers from isolation,they are involving themselves in anti social activities, hence imparting them moral values has become a pivotal role of education. Secondly imparting lectures on hard work and pragmatical approach to professional skill may also creates bonfide workers.

To what was said it must be concerned that if school teach them only their responsibilities towards society, nation and work then they it affect them psychologically they feel themselves to be overburden as they are not mature enough to adopt all these easily. Moreover providing atmosphere of self expression give them opportunity to express their hidden talents which they can adopt as precession and become independent one.

In my humble opinion, a logical approach should be adopted by schools. They must provide society with best citizens but not at the cost of their development. They must be provided atmosphere of expression simultaneously..

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS General Training

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 1, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'i' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'have'
Suggestion: Have
... therefore he they might be grown up i Has become a debatable issue.one school of ...
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Line 2, column 188, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: I
...they should taught to be self dependent.I personally partially agree with the sta...
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Line 4, column 39, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'native'?
Suggestion: native
... Teaching children to be a responsible natives are need of hour because in todays cut ...
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Line 4, column 188, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , they
...equently children suffers from isolation,they are involving themselves in anti social...
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Line 4, column 194, Rule ID: PROGRESSIVE_VERBS[1]
Message: This verb is normally not used in the progressive form. Try a simple form instead.
...ly children suffers from isolation,they are involving themselves in anti social activities, h...
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Line 6, column 139, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'affects'?
Suggestion: affects
...s society, nation and work then they it affect them psychologically they feel themselv...
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Line 6, column 262, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Moreover,
...ature enough to adopt all these easily. Moreover providing atmosphere of self expression...
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Line 8, column 98, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'with the best'.
Suggestion: with the best
...d by schools. They must provide society with best citizens but not at the cost of their d...
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Line 8, column 220, Rule ID: DOUBLE_PUNCTUATION
Message: Two consecutive dots
Suggestion: .
... atmosphere of expression simultaneously..
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1196.0 1615.20841683 74% => OK
No of words: 217.0 315.596192385 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51152073733 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0658221118 2.80592935109 109% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.041082164 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.663594470046 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 372.6 506.74238477 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 16.0721442886 50% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.2975951904 133% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 100.079968026 49.4020404114 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 149.5 106.682146367 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.125 20.7667163134 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.0 7.06120827912 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.122089133817 0.244688304435 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510514020181 0.084324248473 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0392668238718 0.0667982634062 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0689364063791 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0356279730814 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 13.0946893788 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 50.2224549098 71% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.97 12.4159519038 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.0 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.5 9.78957915832 209% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.1190380762 126% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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