It is undoubted that people’s appearance is becoming more and more significant than in the past few decades because of the influence by more and more events about beauty such as fashion show and pageant. The intention of beauty is also showing on the clothes that people are wearing. Here are some reasons demonstrated that why people intend to wear fashionable clothes.
First of all, wearing new released clothes makes them feel they are not being left behind. They want to be part of this modern society, and they want to have social connection with the fast-changing world. Fashion industry as one of the fast-changing industry which indicates that who follow the fashion, who will get the newest trend.
Additionally, main force media and its advertisements constantly convey the information that people need to buy fashionable clothes to build confidence. They even use famous celebrities to influence people to buy more newest clothes. Those younger generations with immature mindset who has took the most energy form stars will receive the information and apply the rules to the real life, which lead to an even more wave of chasing fashion.
In my opinion, over chasing fashion is unreasonable. It will let you lose your identity since you are looking exactly the same with your peers, which is also unhealthy for personal development in foresting unique characteristic. Furthermore, spending on more money on buying a lot of new clothes that are not under discount will lead to unbalanced of your allowance which commonly happened to young people.
To concluded, common value is not only be the responsibility of young people’s parents, but also the obligation of main force. More and more focus on the fashion will lead the society to the unhealthy trending chasing. If more valuable information can be brought through the media, the world will become better.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 168, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...thes to build confidence. They even use famous celebrities to influence people to buy more newest ...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: MOST_SUPERLATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'newest' (without 'more') when you use the superlative.
Suggestion: newest
... celebrities to influence people to buy more newest clothes. Those younger generations with...
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Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'more the newest'.
Suggestion: more the newest
... celebrities to influence people to buy more newest clothes. Those younger generations with...
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Line 5, column 291, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...nerations with immature mindset who has took the most energy form stars will receive...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, look, so, as to, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1582.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15309446254 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78914869522 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57654723127 0.561755894193 103% => OK
syllable_count: 484.2 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.2418834887 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.466666667 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4666666667 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.86666666667 7.06120827912 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.130599281462 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480321853519 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0383876704219 0.0667982634062 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0728316166875 0.151304729494 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358983507266 0.056905535591 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 13.0946893788 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.59 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.