Many students spend hours a day using smartphones Why is this the case Do you think this is a positive or a negative development

Theseday , It is believed that children shouldn’t spend too much time using smartphones . Althought , this idea is reasonable to some extent , i would argue that children spend many hours on their smartphones .

On the one hand , i am convinced that children should have smartphones and using it everyday .Firstly , smartphones are extremely convenient for study of children . when student need to find information or to solve a problem , smartphones are really important. I always bring my smartphones in school and i receive many advantages from it. Secondly , parents can easily communicate with their children by calls so the safeness of children always be ensured . I always feel good when i am able to talk to my younger brother everytime.
On the other hand , Spending too much time on smartphones is not good for children . Firstly , children have to be suffered many disease of eyes so the quality of life is affected too much. At present , my eyes are not good because i have used smartphones 5 years .
Secondly , Smartphones have many games and platform of social media so children will spend all of their time to use it , Therefore they don not focus on studying and spending time on relationships Additionally , they will not talk too much with their parents and the family don not happy .

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Average: 5.6 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1077.0 1615.20841683 67% => OK
No of words: 216.0 315.596192385 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.98611111111 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.83365862548 4.20363070211 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86185763113 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 176.041082164 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541666666667 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 324.9 506.74238477 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 60.1261758704 49.4020404114 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.9090909091 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6363636364 20.7667163134 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 7.06120827912 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 43.0 5.01903807615 857% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177875376091 0.244688304435 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0799836311276 0.084324248473 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0602200779113 0.0667982634062 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129485442833 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.065762433897 0.056905535591 116% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 13.0946893788 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 12.4159519038 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.58950901804 87% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 78.4519038076 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.

Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.