THESEDAY, It is believed that children SHOULD NOT spend A LOT OF time ON using smartphones .
Although this idea is reasonable to some extent , i would argue that THEY COULD spend many hours on their smartphones .
On the one hand , I i am convinced that children should OWN THEIR smartphones and USE it everyday .
- Firstly , smartphones are extremely convenient for CHILDREN LEARNING / THE STUDYING OF CHILDREN. study of children . WHEN students need to find information or solve a problem BY USING SMARTPHONES TO HAVE ACCESS TO THE INTERNET, IT IS EASIER FOR STUDENT FIND WHAT THEY NEED BY PHONE THAN READING ALL OF TEXTBOOKS. - Secondly , RELATION can easily KEEP IN TOUCH/ STAY IN TOUCH/ REMAIN CONNECTION with their KIDS by callING TO ENSURE THAT THEY ARE SAFE .ACTUALLY/ HONESTLY, I OFTEN MAKE A CALL FOR MY YOUNGER BROTHER TO GUARANTEE HIS SAFENESS, EVEN THOUGH I AM ABLE TO REMAIN CONNECTION TO HIS TUTOR/ TEACHER/ PRINCIPAL TO ASK HIS ACADEMIC RESULT
• Body 2 : IT IS UNDERSTANDABLE WHY SOME PEOPLE AVOCATE + VING
On the other hand , PHONE ABUSE/ADDICTION CAUSE =DETRIMENTAL EFFECT ON EYES DISORDERS AS BLINDNESS, LOW VISION AND LEARNING PROCESS DISRUPTION.
=> RESTRICTING THE TIME OF USING THE PHONE OF THEIR CHILDREN.
- Firstly / ON TOP OF THAT/ FIRST OF ALL/ TO BEGIN WITH/ IN MORE DETAILS, children WOULD suffer many diseases of the eyes SUCH AS BLINDNESS, LOW VISION WHICH NEGATIVELY AFFECT ON the quality of life.. FOR EXAMPLE/ FOR INSTANCE/ IN FACT ,I SUFFER SHORT-SIGHTED AFTER CONSTANTLY USING THE PHONE FOR 5 YEARS. - Secondly/ FURTHERMORE/ ADDITIONALLY/ BESIDES/ MOREOVER/. Smartphones have many/ A VAST/ PLENTY OF/ A LARGE OF/ A DEAL OF/ VARIOUS/ DIVERSE/ DIFFERENT/ A WEALTH OF/ platformS of social media AND GAMES, THEREFORE, childrenl WOULD spend all of their time ON usING it AND FINALLY THE LEARNING IS DISRUPTED.
- Additionally , they ARE REDUCED THE ABILITY OF SOCIAL COMMUNICATION. THIS IS BECAUSE THEY ARE LACK OF PHYSICAL INTERACTIVE AMONG OTHER PEOPLE, WHICH SOLELY ARRIVES WHEN THEY COMMUNICATE DIRECTLY BY SPOKEN.
- Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication To what extent do you agree or disagree 61
- Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication To what extent do you agree or disagree 56
- Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones Discuss both these views and give your own opinion Give reasons for your answer and include 73
- Some people believe that a college or a university education should be available to all students Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students Discuss these views which view do you agree with Explain why 67
- Some people think success in life comes from hard work and determination Others think money and appearance are more important Discuss both views and give your opinion 73
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, honestly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2696969697 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99312000209 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593939393939 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 126.511857152 49.4020404114 256% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 124.214285714 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.7857142857 7.06120827912 224% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.38176352705 205% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 41.0 5.01903807615 817% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173055468205 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061006859808 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591811354578 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806118835994 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606395655008 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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