THESEDAY, It is believed that children SHOULD NOT spend A LOT OF time ON using smartphones .
Although this idea is reasonable to some extent , i would argue that THEY COULD spend many hours on their smartphones .
On the one hand , I i am convinced that children should OWN THEIR smartphones and USE it everyday .
- Firstly , smartphones are extremely convenient for CHILDREN LEARNING / THE STUDYING OF CHILDREN. study of children . WHEN students need to find information or solve a problem BY USING SMARTPHONES TO HAVE ACCESS TO THE INTERNET, IT IS EASIER FOR STUDENT FIND WHAT THEY NEED BY PHONE THAN READING ALL OF TEXTBOOKS. - Secondly , RELATION can easily KEEP IN TOUCH/ STAY IN TOUCH/ REMAIN CONNECTION with their KIDS by callING TO ENSURE THAT THEY ARE SAFE .ACTUALLY/ HONESTLY, I OFTEN MAKE A CALL FOR MY YOUNGER BROTHER TO GUARANTEE HIS SAFENESS, EVEN THOUGH I AM ABLE TO REMAIN CONNECTION TO HIS TUTOR/ TEACHER/ PRINCIPAL TO ASK HIS ACADEMIC RESULT
• Body 2 : IT IS UNDERSTANDABLE WHY SOME PEOPLE AVOCATE + VING
On the other hand , PHONE ABUSE/ADDICTION CAUSE =DETRIMENTAL EFFECT ON EYES DISORDERS AS BLINDNESS, LOW VISION AND LEARNING PROCESS DISRUPTION.
=> RESTRICTING THE TIME OF USING THE PHONE OF THEIR CHILDREN.
- Firstly / ON TOP OF THAT/ FIRST OF ALL/ TO BEGIN WITH/ IN MORE DETAILS, children WOULD suffer many diseases of the eyes SUCH AS BLINDNESS, LOW VISION WHICH NEGATIVELY AFFECT ON the quality of life.. FOR EXAMPLE/ FOR INSTANCE/ IN FACT ,I SUFFER SHORT-SIGHTED AFTER CONSTANTLY USING THE PHONE FOR 5 YEARS. - Secondly/ FURTHERMORE/ ADDITIONALLY/ BESIDES/ MOREOVER/. Smartphones have many/ A VAST/ PLENTY OF/ A LARGE OF/ A DEAL OF/ VARIOUS/ DIVERSE/ DIFFERENT/ A WEALTH OF/ platformS of social media AND GAMES, THEREFORE, childrenl WOULD spend all of their time ON usING it AND FINALLY THE LEARNING IS DISRUPTED.
- Additionally , they ARE REDUCED THE ABILITY OF SOCIAL COMMUNICATION. THIS IS BECAUSE THEY ARE LACK OF PHYSICAL INTERACTIVE AMONG OTHER PEOPLE, WHICH SOLELY ARRIVES WHEN THEY COMMUNICATE DIRECTLY BY SPOKEN.
- Many young people today choose or are forced to go and work abroad What are the advantages disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country compared with living and working in your own country Discuss both views and give your own opinion 67
- Many young people today choose or are forced to go and work abroad What are the advantages disadvantages of living and working in a foreign country compared with living and working in your own country Discuss both views and give your own opinion 67
- Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones Why is this case Do you think this is a positive or negative development 67
- It is important for people to take risks both in their professional lives and their personal lives Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages 78
- Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication To what extent do you agree or disagree 61
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, finally, first, firstly, furthermore, honestly, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in fact, such as, first of all, to begin with, on the other hand, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 24.0651302605 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1739.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 330.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2696969697 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.26214759535 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99312000209 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593939393939 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 514.8 506.74238477 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 126.511857152 49.4020404114 256% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 124.214285714 106.682146367 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5714285714 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.7857142857 7.06120827912 224% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 9.0 4.38176352705 205% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 41.0 5.01903807615 817% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173055468205 0.244688304435 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061006859808 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0591811354578 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806118835994 0.151304729494 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606395655008 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 13.0946893788 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 12.4159519038 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.94 8.58950901804 116% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 78.4519038076 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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