The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career.To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The mark of a successful person is to be wealthy and have a successful career.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

This statement doesn’t reflect a hundred percent the reality in my point of view. Actually, I would say that it’s an incomplete idea. Indeed, richness is an aspect of life that is important for make someone successful however there are a few other aspects that should be considered when we’re talking about this. So, health, family and relationships are personal sides of the life that are tremendously relevant for someone who’s seeking being a successful person as well.

I would argue that having a strong carrier is a big challenge for most of us. In fact, an impressive job and progression in a career usually take so much efforts from people and this totally worth it in my opinion. Having money saved for retirement, living in a large house and, either, having a fancy car are results of people’s efforts in their careers. Also, I think that who achieves these status deserve to enjoy all rewards that come with it.

Despite of all these positive aspects, I don’t think that it is all. Although, I really believe that are some personal skills that are truly relevant for successful persons. If they have all influence and status from a high level career but they left their relationships behind with their relatives or children, I think these guys have failed. By this, I mean that people should learn how to balance all areas of their lives. If one of them was neglected, they won’t be able to be a successful person.

Then, this balance in the life is so important that we can see some statistics from University of Manitoba saying how many businesses wealthy people are unhappy, at least in Canada. In fact, the level of suicide and divorce is thirty and forty-five percent bigger in high productive people than in others, respectively. If you invest too much energy in only your career, this means that something is not going as expected with some other area; and really should have your attention.

Therefore, I don’t totally agree that people who have only a wealthy life or well-developed career are truly successful. Otherwise, I think that invest in emotional health or even in cozy relationships aren’t as hard as that.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 150, Rule ID: MUCH_COUNTABLE[1]
Message: Use 'many' with countable nouns.
Suggestion: many
...progression in a career usually take so much efforts from people and this totally wo...
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Line 3, column 394, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this status' or 'these statuses'?
Suggestion: this status; these statuses
...areers. Also, I think that who achieves these status deserve to enjoy all rewards that come ...
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Line 9, column 219, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r even in cozy relationships aren't as hard as that.
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, really, so, then, therefore, well, at least, i mean, i think, in fact, talking about, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 7.30460921844 274% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 1615.20841683 113% => OK
No of words: 368.0 315.596192385 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96195652174 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37987740619 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74235813108 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 176.041082164 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557065217391 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 570.6 506.74238477 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 5.43587174349 239% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.8308537892 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.444444444 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.38888888889 7.06120827912 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183355682552 0.244688304435 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0567608280008 0.084324248473 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0626042777652 0.0667982634062 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100107650012 0.151304729494 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358909158177 0.056905535591 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 13.0946893788 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.4159519038 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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