More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem.To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that increasing the price of fattening foods will solve this problem.
To what extend do you agree or disagree?

creativeness can be triggered by learning various other subjects which builds strong foundation for the entire life. it's a wide spread thought, teaching subjects on music and drama can be fortunate for the next generation, apparently, the believers recommends the inclusion of these subject in schools. With my perception, I agree on this, and the below essay illustrates both up and downsides, ending up with the fact that shows merits outweighs the demerits.

Let's see the positive side of learning extra-curicular activities like music,arts, drama and creative writing. Fristly, it helps in reducing the stress in kids, phsycologist prescribes music and drawing as a source to cure hyper-activiness for kids. Furthermore there are several other neuron related disease which can be minimised by educating kids with arts. Secondly, it induce the innovative thoughts in kids which pay a great fortune. According to world Children Healthcare, Students involves in drama and music has a better memory power and good in their academics. Most importantly, second talent can always gives you upper hand and stand distinctly from the crowd, example Just Beiber learnt music at his age of 4 and now he is one of the richest musician in the world.

Looking in to the negative side, too much involment can distract them completely from education and make them evade a normal life. new York times says, kids involved in extra-curicular skills learning are more prone to drugs along with other illicit activities. However, the article has been disgarded since there is no concrete proof.

To conclude, parents should make their kids to learn new skills which benefits in many ways specifically this new skill may bring a wonderful future in many ways.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1471.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 281.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.23487544484 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84372145041 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.67615658363 0.561755894193 120% => OK
syllable_count: 447.3 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.4414095688 49.4020404114 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.153846154 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6153846154 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.30769230769 7.06120827912 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 5.01903807615 279% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0315542171198 0.244688304435 13% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00964923885669 0.084324248473 11% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0162416553361 0.0667982634062 24% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0199851347005 0.151304729494 13% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00765332969284 0.056905535591 13% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 13.0946893788 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.12 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 78.4519038076 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.

Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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