Music should not be taught in schools. Instead, other subjects such as compurers and science should be taught. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Music, computers, science are some of the subjects which are teaching in schools but it is said that music is not important as much as other ones, and can be left out. It seems to me that it is just a poor view of the education system in the present century. I will explain why in this essay.
Firstly, the schools have to create appropriate situations in order to develop various aspects of student's talent. This is because pupils who are put next to each other in a class have different hidden talents. Obviously, They need to get some primary education in all fields such as music, computers, and science in which they could comprehend what they will be able to do in the coming future. Secondly, it is clear that scholars need to do somewhat joyful activities. In general, art-related activities such as playing music, dancing, painting contribute to having pleasant moments. These types of subjects can raise student's spirits, as a result, they would be much more capable of learning other subjects.
It is true that students can learn kinds of art as leisure activities out of school time. Despite this schools are responsible for instructing learners in the whole of subjects which will be useful in the future.
To conclude, it undoubtedly appears that education curriculum needs to consist of music, computers, science and other fields. If one of these subjects were ignored, it would have long-term impacts on student's interest in learning during the school time.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 31, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
Music, computers, science are some of the subjects which are teaching in schools ...
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Line 5, column 99, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
... activities out of school time. Despite this schools are responsible for instructing...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, in general, such as, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 13.1623246493 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 41.998997996 86% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1235.0 1615.20841683 76% => OK
No of words: 250.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97635364384 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61353094491 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 176.041082164 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556 0.561755894193 99% => OK
syllable_count: 369.0 506.74238477 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0464285704 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.0 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2307692308 20.7667163134 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 7.06120827912 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191271481827 0.244688304435 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0645152663613 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0538485990435 0.0667982634062 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118707816942 0.151304729494 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0381627000669 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.4159519038 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.99 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 78.4519038076 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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