n some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies What do you think are the causes of this What solutions can you suggest

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n some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

In some countries, it is common for teenagers to work hard, resulting in not having much free time and being under a lot of stress. This essay discusses the reasons why the reality exists, and also suggests how to solve this.
In my opinion, it is mainly due to education system in some nations like China, Vietnam, or Korea. Their education systems pay attention to teaching subjects to get into higher levels.To illustrate, it is true that in recent years, the Vietnamese ministry of education has added English to examinations and considered it as one of the main subjects. Besides, they only focus on theory than experiment, and each student to spend much time on doing homework, enriching knowledge or preparing for next lessons. Furthermore, both teenagers’ parents and their schools always expect them to succeed in life. Thus, students are put under a lot of pressure on their studies to get good academic qualifications, which are considered like the key to find work easily in highly competitive societies, or to buy houses. For instance, in heavily populated countries such as China, it can be seen that there are over 10,000 students taking part in entrance exams; the exam pressure increases resulting in the high suicide rate among teenagers. Additionally, in Hong Kong, where the real estate prices are extremely expensive, it is customary for children to study 10 hours a day, and work from the age of 14, so they able to buy a house. Therefore, all of reasons originate from economic environment and the cost of living.
However, the problem can be fought. Firstly, teenagers’ parents should change their mind. They should believe that education is not the only key to succeed in life. As a consequence, Bill Gates gave up learning to found Microsoft, however, now he is always on the list of the richest people in the world. Additionally, education system and schools should reduce the amount of homework, examinations, and encourage students to spend their leisure time on pursuing hobbies, or doing what they want to do. As the result of this, teenagers can improve social skills, or creation, and they have more motivation for learning.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that the amount of teenagers’ leisure time is based on the cultural background they are educated. And if we can reduce working hours at school or at the office, we won’t be under stress and increase the productivity.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for instance, in conclusion, such as, in my opinion, it is true

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2018.0 1615.20841683 125% => OK
No of words: 406.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97044334975 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48881294772 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79294271525 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 176.041082164 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.568965517241 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 10.0 0.809619238477 1235% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2816967224 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.111111111 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.5555555556 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 7.06120827912 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.224761714928 0.244688304435 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0599244003187 0.084324248473 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0508229839898 0.0667982634062 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138613427731 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0425077275287 0.056905535591 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 13.0946893788 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 12.4159519038 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.58950901804 103% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 78.4519038076 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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