Although there are some disadvantages of the fact that children enjoying their spare time have changed due to new technologies, I believe that the benefits are outweight its drawbacks.
There are some reasons why technologies affect negatively on children’s habits. Firstly, instead of taking part in outdoor activities, kids just stay at home playing game on computer or watching movies. This sedentary lifestyle would increase the risks of obesity or heart diseases. Secondly, adolescents immerse into technological devices because of its attractions, would make them less concentrate to study. My brother is a case in point, he used to skip class to play computer game in secondary school period.
On the other hand, new technologies benefit significantly for children. They could take full advantages of technological development to enjoy their free time anywhere in any conditions. For examples, if someone is receiving treatment in the hospital and can not go out for relaxing, they may use the mobile phone to talk with friends, reading books or listening music on it. Additionally, technologies provide not only various enjoynable choices in spare time, but also numorous knowledge for children’s discovery. Internet is a big library which allow kids searching information easily. For instance, in order to fully understand about wild life of animals, real vivid images are better more than discriptions from books.
In conclusion, despite some negative effects of new technologies on children’s choices of free time , I totally agree with the point that its advantages are beyond the disadvantages.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, may, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 7.30460921844 55% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 41.998997996 88% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1378.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 249.0 315.596192385 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.53413654618 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.97237131171 4.20363070211 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19399436443 2.80592935109 114% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.706827309237 0.561755894193 126% => OK
syllable_count: 433.8 506.74238477 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.1757669872 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 106.682146367 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 7.06120827912 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267026278451 0.244688304435 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0872244514637 0.084324248473 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0988632130075 0.0667982634062 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177872898371 0.151304729494 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.084008618009 0.056905535591 148% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 50.2224549098 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.79 12.4159519038 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.02 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 78.4519038076 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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