Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamor and wealth than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is an issue about the impact famous members of society has on the public. Some people argue that those celebrities, who have become popular for being rich and style, have some effect on youngsters as role models. This essay agrees with their point of view.
Let us with the reasons why some some teachers believe that gaining fame by looking vogue and being rich is an unsuccessful role model for the public. The first reason is that children perform unwell at school. Students focus more on both fashion and money rather than academic achievement, so they often fail exams. Another reason is that the youth may develop a desire to excel by appearance and money. Young adults, who have to attach public attention to themselves, may concentrate too much on how look attractive and earn more money instead of on how to develop soft skills. Furthermore, the minority of people usually suffer from rejection. Children, who are from poor families, may become rogue, since they cannot afford expensive clothes and correspond to the peer expectations in appearance.
However, some social workers believe that there is nothing wrong in young people following the these celebrities. They justify their point of view by the following arguments. Firstly, youngsters learn how to dress well. Observing how famous people dress teaches children develop a sense of fashion, which will help them in adulthood. Secondly, they learn the importance of money in the world. Noticing how money influences people, students will understand that if they want to succeed in life, they need to have a large income by either working hard or opening a company. In addition, young children have common topics to discuss. Talking about the wardrobe and the money of famous individuals does not mean to copy their lifestyle, but to be good subjects of conversation at meal times.
In conclusion, although some social workers state that fame, which comes for being affluent and fashionable, has little negative effect on the youth, I think that this type of fame destroy the desire for accomplishment.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: some
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, well, i think, in addition, in conclusion, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1742.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 342.0 315.596192385 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.09356725146 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57452113833 2.80592935109 92% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 176.041082164 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.587719298246 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 526.5 506.74238477 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.1452767632 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.6842105263 106.682146367 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.0 20.7667163134 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.15789473684 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.129825243145 0.244688304435 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0383479348074 0.084324248473 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.041363643765 0.0667982634062 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0871413217427 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0256501128893 0.056905535591 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 13.0946893788 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.58950901804 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 9.78957915832 82% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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