Nowadays children spend more time playing computer games than doing sports. Why is it happening? Does it have a positive or negative effect on their development?

Computer games has become a part of life for most of the children than outdoor games. This essay will first discuss that this sort of activities are going to have a great deal of negative empact not only on them but also their future and then submit a possible solution to overcome such apathy towards games and sports.
A new era of development brought a tremendous change from eating habits to life style.Many children had lot of fun on video games then outdoor games, smart phones are the primary reasons for such.They find it more sophisticated,less stressfuland best time pass.A peer group acquaintance instead of talking prefer to chatt on social media.A recent survey conducted by british cambridge university found that only 20 % of the students participated in the national sport event which is dropping dramatically as the years passes.
The most viable solution could be encouragement from parents,at school level so that they can be tempted and develop enthusiasm towards it, on the other hand limited use of mobile and system should be enforced by the parents and this widespread apathy among should be decline if only the positive side of sports and games appeal to them.Times recently reported that a majority of athletics who participate in olympics are from norway as the universities and school had mandatory made sports as part of academics,which indeed made norway as number one in the field of sports sector.
In conclusion a robust callisthenic environment should be developed around pupils so that they should not deflects from the path of success and enhance themselves in every best way they can rather than being on apps where does not exists in real life as it causes disillusionment.

Votes
Average: 8.4 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, then, thus, in conclusion, sort of, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 24.0651302605 79% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1434.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.04929577465 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83028514541 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.637323943662 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 506.74238477 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 5.0 16.0721442886 31% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 56.0 20.2975951904 276% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 186.403433445 49.4020404114 377% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 286.8 106.682146367 269% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 56.8 20.7667163134 274% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 15.8 7.06120827912 224% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 19.0 5.01903807615 379% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.67935871743 46% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146799499855 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0883231732775 0.084324248473 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0435008055318 0.0667982634062 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0881989790117 0.151304729494 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567205534861 0.056905535591 100% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 30.8 13.0946893788 235% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 14.64 50.2224549098 29% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.1 11.3001002004 222% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.9 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.25 8.58950901804 131% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 9.78957915832 184% => OK
gunning_fog: 24.4 10.1190380762 241% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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