Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing(for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, people being monitored are unaware about that this is happening.Do you think the advan

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Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing(for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras). In many cases, people being monitored are unaware about that this is happening.
Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

In today's era, technology is playing significant role in people's life. Some recent advancement in technology enable monitoring of people in the name of safety. However, some people believe that tracking and monitoring people can lead to the adverse effect on our society. In my opinion, ill-effects of this technology is more severe than their benefits.

Let us begin by looking some positives of using these technologies. One of the major benefits is that it help to diminish the crime. By tracking criminal's mobile location and capturing them in the closed circuit cameras available in public places, police are solving most of the cases these days. In UK, for example, more than half of the criminal cases were solved using CCTV footage, and government also asserts that many terrorist attacks have been prevented with the help of this.

On the other side, unethical usage of these technologies can lead to individual's privacy concerns. Many times people have been monitored not only in public places but also in private places without their concern or awareness which assist criminals to target their victims. For instance, videos taken from hidden cameras in the hotel rooms can be used to blackmail young victims. Owing to such event, many people even lead to sucide in the past. Such events increase the crime rates. Hence, the argument that technology helps reducing the crime does not hold any water in this case.

In conclusion, advancement in devices of monitoring helped solve many cases, however, it is contributing to more severe crime by capturing and blackmailing people. Hence, I believe that demerits of tracking and monitoring outweigh its usefulness.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, however, if, look, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 7.85571142285 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1383.0 1615.20841683 86% => OK
No of words: 269.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.14126394052 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0498419064 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62236501565 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 176.041082164 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.587360594796 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.0485611806 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.4375 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8125 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.0 7.06120827912 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 3.9879759519 251% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254155490855 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077450962765 0.084324248473 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047504198671 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.149175121225 0.151304729494 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550277317304 0.056905535591 97% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 13.0946893788 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 46.78 50.2224549098 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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