It is ubiquitously seen that youngsters of a modern generation often spend their leisure time in shopping malls. Few people in society believe that this trend may create a negative impact on the children as well as in the society they live in. I profoundly agree with the view that it can have a detrimental effect on young people because firstly, they may get distracted from their studies and secondly, they may face serious health problems such as obesity and breathing.
To start with, young children are inclined towards visiting shopping malls whenever they are free. It is because they can spend enough time playing the latest games available at a reasonable price in the malls and thus escape from studies. Out of 100 children, 75 participate in playing different types of games as per the recent survey conducted in Manjeera Mall, Hyderabad. Moreover, this money if put to better use, like, education for poor or for self-improvement can ensure a better society. I strongly believe that parents should restrict children visiting the malls very often and use the money wisely.
Additionally, children visiting shopping malls every now and then can get attacked with serious health problems. To elaborate, there are a plethora of food items available in the malls apart from games, clothes, and footwear shopping stores. As young children tend to eat colorful and tasty foods, they eat junk foods such as pizza, burgers, noodles, and whatnot, which can lead to obesity and breathing problems at such a tender age. For instance, 60% of the youngsters throughout the world are suffering from obesity, a disorder involving the storage of excess fat underneath the skin.
On the contrary, some believe that young people should visit the malls frequently to get socialized and enjoy the facilities available all around and get updated about today’s living culture.
To summarize, although there are benefits of visiting the shopping malls, to get relaxed by playing games and eating different cuisines, I personally believe that if it exceeds the limit, young citizens have to face the consequences such as being unsuccessful in life and face health-related problems.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 48, Rule ID: EVERY_NOW_AND_THEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'now and then'.
Suggestion: now and then
...nally, children visiting shopping malls every now and then can get attacked with serious health pr...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, well, apart from, for instance, such as, as well as, on the contrary, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 10.4138276553 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1838.0 1615.20841683 114% => OK
No of words: 353.0 315.596192385 112% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20679886686 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33454660006 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71656470123 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546742209632 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 553.5 506.74238477 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 54.6671281298 49.4020404114 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.285714286 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2142857143 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 7.06120827912 154% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.241468922231 0.244688304435 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082135169336 0.084324248473 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852045188466 0.0667982634062 128% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.14306667926 0.151304729494 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126172494209 0.056905535591 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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