Nowadays young people spend too much of their free time in shopping malls. This has negative effects on themselves and the society they live in. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
There is a tendency that more and more youngsters spend their leisure time in modern shopping malls. Some people argue that this trend does not have a good impact to neither themselves nor their local society. Basically, while shopping malls are not the ideal places to invest people’s free time, I disagree with the idea that spending too much time in these malls is delivering negative effects.
There are no reasons to stop young people from spending too much their time staying in shopping malls. In fact, it is better for the society when individuals gather in one place to shop or relax after work or study. Since more youngsters are willing to stay inside of the malls, the outdoor environment of their local area will be much clearer which is better for other people who like refreshing atmosphere. Furthermore, people can also register to run their businesses in the malls which provide better security and save a big amount of time travelling to work. For example, before two biggest malls in district 7 in Ho Chi Minh City were built, local retailers in the area had had to put their shops in district 1 or 3 which consumed a lot of time to commute from their houses.
However, it is still such a waste of time when young people staying too long inside of these shopping malls. With their leisure time, they can participate in activities that contribute to their own community such as picking up garbage on the streets or helping the elders in the neighborhood. Moreover, by contributing to their local society, youngsters can have more chances to meet other people which help them develop their social skills.
In conclusion, although it is not recommended to spend too much time in shopping malls, I do not believe that doing this will have negative effects on people and their society.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 677, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: had
...were built, local retailers in the area had had to put their shops in district 1 or 3 w...
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Line 7, column 35, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'recommended spending'.
Suggestion: recommended spending
...s. In conclusion, although it is not recommended to spend too much time in shopping malls, I do n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, moreover, so, still, while, for example, in conclusion, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1502.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 312.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8141025641 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20279927342 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50403192295 2.80592935109 89% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.535256410256 0.561755894193 95% => OK
syllable_count: 454.5 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 40.1597504419 49.4020404114 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.166666667 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.7667163134 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.75 7.06120827912 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.36662864077 0.244688304435 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151461216701 0.084324248473 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102097194495 0.0667982634062 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.267672544922 0.151304729494 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0920585016673 0.056905535591 162% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 78.4519038076 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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