People are consuming more sugar nowadays and it is causing health problems.
Some people feel that the government should take responsibility, while others feel it is the responsibility of the individual.
Discuss both the views and give your opinion?
Eating too much Sugar is definitely attributing to ill-health. Nowadays People are using much more of sugar which is contributing to high levels of medical problems. Some individuals are of the opinion that the government needs to take charge of the situation whereas, other opine that a person should take the responsibility of his own heath. This essay would develop arguments on both sides of the views with proper validations as well as clearly express my position.
On the one side, people who believe that government should exercise authority to curb the current menace in the society due to over-consumption of sugar. As using more sugar is the prime cause of a lethal disease known as diabetes. This chronic disease by itself comes with many complications and implications. Like, first of all it is not a recoverable disease and If diabetes is not kept under control then the affected person is at a risk to contract skin problems, losing eyesight. Blood pressure as well as heart diseases. For instance, in India the second most popular disease leading to deaths could be attributed to diabetes. Before diabetes prove to engulf the entire nation’s population to the proportion of an epidemic. The government should take strict measures like taxing raw sugar and even sweetmeats with artificial sugar heavily to curb the sales and even consumption of sugar to save the economy of losing its most productive youth to this deadly disease.
On the other side, others view limiting the use of sugar can’t be addressed by the government it is an individual’s responsibility to consume sugar in moderation and even exercise, as this kind of a lifestyle would prove to be highly salubrious. The government has to tackle many more major issues on the national front take for example poverty, illiteracy, pollution etc. So, we cannot expect the government to take responsibility of our personal health issues, which arises by and large due personal negligence to, health, stress management and even exercise. So for example, people who suffer from hereditary diabetes, who have come with preventive measures like cutting down on artificial sugars and following and regular exercise regime and their proactive actions have certainly proved to be instrumental in helping them leading a Diabetes free a long and fit life.
To conclude, I would like to come with the opinion that controlling excess sugar consumption should be as an individual’s sole concern as it comes with individual long term benefits. Simply, with frugal consumption of sugar a person can lead a fitter, happier and also an effervescent life.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: and
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Suggestion: kind of
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Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to lead' or 'lead'.
Suggestion: to lead; lead
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...consumption of sugar a person can lead a fitter, happier and also an effervescent...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, then, well, whereas, as to, for example, for instance, kind of, as well as, by and large, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 10.4138276553 115% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2212.0 1615.20841683 137% => OK
No of words: 427.0 315.596192385 135% => OK
Chars per words: 5.18032786885 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.20363070211 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98752495464 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 176.041082164 133% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548009367681 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 713.7 506.74238477 141% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 70.0317388364 49.4020404114 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.888888889 106.682146367 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.7222222222 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.233815815382 0.244688304435 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0709896038633 0.084324248473 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0586882063113 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153088762397 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0755140489993 0.056905535591 133% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 50.2224549098 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 11.3001002004 119% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.4159519038 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.25 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 78.4519038076 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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