Research has shown that overeating is as harmful as smoking. Therefore, the advertising of certain food products should be banned in the same way as the advertising of cigarettes is banned.
Do you agree or disagree?
While statistics can be refuted, there is convincing evidence that excessive consumption of food would result in some detrimental effects similar to smoking. Therefore, there is a common held view by many people who believe food advertising should be forbidden, however, I disagree with this attitude because of some underlying reasons.
To begin with, food industry is one of the main productive industries of any country which make a significant contribution to making income. Also, this industry pave the way of both creating many job opportunities for citizens and increasing the quality of products in this competitive world. By deterring manufacturer from advertising their products, the productivity of these companies would be reduced fundamentally, consequently, not only the unemployment rate might be increased but also the quality of products might be declined by eliminating the need for competition.
Secondly, advertisement play vital role not only in making revenue but also in educating people. In fact, according to a great deal of research, commercials are considered to be one of the most effective measures in raising public awareness. Hypothetically, if we take this view that the general knowledge of citizens will be increased through advertisements, it is logical to suggest that via advertisements, people are able to gain a vast amount of information about the advantages and disadvantages as well as the production process. Furthermore, this situation provide people with more option to choose.
Admittedly, it is true that advertisements are able to persuade people to buy more than their real needs, but banding them seems to be a temporarily solution. While, preventing people from overeating can be achieved by teaching them about those negative effects that are associated with this phenomenon.
In conclusion, it seems that putting ban on advertising some food in order to mitigate the drawbacks of overconsumption of food cause more chronic and complex concerns in terms of productivity and also public awareness.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.3376753507 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1747.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 316.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.52848101266 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21620550194 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.28823356396 2.80592935109 117% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.591772151899 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 558.0 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.7592585869 49.4020404114 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.583333333 106.682146367 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 20.7667163134 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.1666666667 7.06120827912 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211930126823 0.244688304435 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0723569183019 0.084324248473 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478602665367 0.0667982634062 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119087500466 0.151304729494 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345164743403 0.056905535591 61% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 13.0946893788 136% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.17 50.2224549098 56% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 11.3001002004 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.82 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 9.78957915832 148% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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