Some believe that people should not continue to work once they reach the age of retirement.Do you agree or disagree?Give reasons for your answer and include relevant examples from your experience.
Retirement age has risen in recent years due to improved health and living standards.But some people believe that when someone reaches retirement, they stop working.I will agree and state my reasons, together with examples in the following paragraphs.
Entering retirement is an extremely critical phase of working life because, in addition to the financial and economic problems caused by falling incomes, they experience stress and fear due to dramatic changes in the way they live.And given that life expectancy in developed countries has increased, people need to be financially retired.The government must take fundamental measures to address the problems of retireesØOtherwise retirees will have to re-enter the chlorine market to meet their living needs.In Iranian education, for example, the government is inviting retirees to reduce the credit of the ministry.This will render the young workforce idle and this will inflict irreparable damage to society from an economic, social point of view.
Retirement is an important transition in life
Along with important changes in lifestyle and social roles and health and physical conditions
is.When a person is working longer than retirement age, it can have a negative impact on their mental and physical health, which can impair their optimal performance and negatively affect the country's economy.For example, Japan can say that its retirement age has been increased by good living conditions,But this has not only been beneficial, but it has had a negative impact on mental and physical health, and research shows that suicide rates among retirees have increased.
In conclusion, think that although retirement age has many benefits for older people, its disadvantages are greater because they reduce the young workforce and also endanger the health of retirees.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 10.4138276553 163% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1567.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 278.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63669064748 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08329915638 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94008805978 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 176.041082164 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.60071942446 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 486.9 506.74238477 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 16.0721442886 25% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 69.0 20.2975951904 340% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 235.811895374 49.4020404114 477% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 391.75 106.682146367 367% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 69.5 20.7667163134 335% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 14.5 7.06120827912 205% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 10.0 5.01903807615 199% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.119673022051 0.244688304435 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0852214532026 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569068524717 0.0667982634062 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577841403875 0.151304729494 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0611456081485 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 39.9 13.0946893788 305% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -15.48 50.2224549098 -31% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 17.1 7.44779559118 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 32.6 11.3001002004 288% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.62 12.4159519038 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 12.23 8.58950901804 142% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 78.4519038076 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 30.5 9.78957915832 312% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 29.6 10.1190380762 293% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 17.0 10.7795591182 158% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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