Some people become famous when they are young age. Do you think is it positive or negative?
I definitely think that there are more disadvantages to become famous in a young age than positive sides. By this I’m not saying that there are not advantages at all, I am just saying that you might not have maturity enough to manage all consequences of a famous lifestyle.
Honestly, I would say that someone who become pretty known early has more time to safe money and construct your career properly. These people can use their beauty and fame to have sponsorships for their work for instance. They can also use the peak moment of their careers to make fortune or even to stabilize their job. Most of the soccer players for example have until the age of thirty to play in high level and save money enough for the rest of their lives. Then, I think that these are good sides of being famous when you are still young.
Despite the advantages I presented above, I would argue that the dangers don’t worth the risks. Understandably, if someone one young has access to huge amount of money and visibility, there is a big chance to him to lost his mind. For instance, a few of stars from Hollywood such as Bradley Cooper or Avril Lavigne usually get addicted or enrolled in some embarrassing situations because they don’t know how to live with all these attention and temptation.
There is a tendency to think that only richness or fame can bring happiness to human hearts. However I would say that especially young stars commonly make this mistake and put all their hope in these kind of things. Honestly, I believe that this thought is prejudicial for their, because when they reach all these things and don’t find happiness right completeness, they usually lose their purpose. For example, Justin Bieber become a christian looking for something else that hi didn’t find in his career, probably a sense of purpose and transcendence. Otherwise, other guys don’t find it like him, and in the worst cases, some of them lost their careers and even commit suicide as well.
Therefore, I would argue that is pretty dangerous someone become a famous person so early, meanly for their own happiness and sense of purpose. Also, they might have some issues with alcohol or drugs either, and this is caused normally by the temptation led by fame and fortune.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: this attention; these attentions
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Suggestion: However,
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Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... this mistake and put all their hope in these kind of things. Honestly, I believe that thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, honestly, however, if, look, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 24.0651302605 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1896.0 1615.20841683 117% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82442748092 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53455296211 2.80592935109 90% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 176.041082164 121% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541984732824 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 594.9 506.74238477 117% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 5.43587174349 202% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5871766398 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.529411765 106.682146367 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1176470588 20.7667163134 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.11764705882 7.06120827912 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216668614642 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0747898460622 0.084324248473 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0862925666702 0.0667982634062 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128652282489 0.151304729494 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0600283596987 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 13.0946893788 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 50.2224549098 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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