Some people become famous when they are young age. Do you think is it positive or negative?
I definitely think that there are more disadvantages to become famous in a young age than positive sides. By this I’m not saying that there are not advantages at all, I am just saying that you might not have maturity enough to manage all consequences of a famous lifestyle.
Honestly, I would say that someone who become pretty known early has more time to safe money and construct your career properly. These people can use their beauty and fame to have sponsorships for their work for instance. They can also use the peak moment of their careers to make fortune or even to stabilize their job. Most of the soccer players for example have until the age of thirty to play in high level and save money enough for the rest of their lives. Then, I think that these are good sides of being famous when you are still young.
Despite the advantages I presented above, I would argue that the dangers don’t worth the risks. Understandably, if someone one young has access to huge amount of money and visibility, there is a big chance to him to lost his mind. For instance, a few of stars from Hollywood such as Bradley Cooper or Avril Lavigne usually get addicted or enrolled in some embarrassing situations because they don’t know how to live with all these attention and temptation.
There is a tendency to think that only richness or fame can bring happiness to human hearts. However I would say that especially young stars commonly make this mistake and put all their hope in these kind of things. Honestly, I believe that this thought is prejudicial for their, because when they reach all these things and don’t find happiness right completeness, they usually lose their purpose. This is a such a terrible thing, and in the worst cases, some of them even commit suicide as well.
Therefore, I would argue that is pretty dangerous someone become a famous person so early, meanly for their own happiness and sense of purpose. Also, they might have some issues with alcohol or drugs either, and this is caused normally by the temptation led by fame and fortune.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 436, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this attention' or 'these attentions'?
Suggestion: this attention; these attentions
...ey don't know how to live with all these attention and temptation. There is a tendency ...
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Line 7, column 94, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...me can bring happiness to human hearts. However I would say that especially young stars...
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Line 7, column 195, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this kind' or 'these kinds'?
Suggestion: this kind; these kinds
... this mistake and put all their hope in these kind of things. Honestly, I believe that thi...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, honestly, however, if, so, still, then, therefore, well, for example, for instance, i think, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 7.30460921844 178% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 24.0651302605 208% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 41.998997996 93% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1615.20841683 107% => OK
No of words: 363.0 315.596192385 115% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7520661157 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3649236973 4.20363070211 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48025082707 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 176.041082164 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539944903581 0.561755894193 96% => OK
syllable_count: 542.7 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 5.43587174349 221% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.2975951904 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8973006776 49.4020404114 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.8125 106.682146367 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6875 20.7667163134 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1875 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229299068626 0.244688304435 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0780927612075 0.084324248473 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0879715535647 0.0667982634062 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129740178266 0.151304729494 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595080671469 0.056905535591 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 13.0946893788 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 50.2224549098 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 11.3001002004 95% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 12.4159519038 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.58950901804 88% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 78.4519038076 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.1190380762 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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