Some people believe that employment over the age of 60 is not right and creates lots of problems. So people should retire after 60 and not work.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
People more than 60 or more are considered as Senior citizens and given a lot of privileges which young and adults are unable to receive. There can be certainly many reasons why most of the countries ask people who are above 60 to retire and rest because the body becomes weak at this age. In my opinion, It is good for the person above 60 to get retirement at this point and focus on their health which helps them to live longer.
People, these days are relying on their memories to work on intricate tasks which deprive with the age. Moreover, in fields like medical, engineering, astronomy and etc., we need people who have a sharp memory to excel in these fields and aids to formulate new ways of doing things. For example, Technologies like web application development is on rapid change i.e there are the different tools in the market which after a few years becomes deprecated so we need young and dynamic people to be a part of these sectors to thrive on success.
However, If we do have experienced people in the sectors like medical, engineering, telecommunication and etc. , supports the system in a much reliable and professional way. They can predict the unforeseen events before it can happen which may save millions-of-dollar. But with the advent of technology, the tools, and elementary knowledge are getting broader which with certain techniques can be well understood and memorize thoroughly and it requires the new brain to become an expert in lesser time.
In conclusion, employment should be allowed until the age of 60 so that people can enjoy the rest of their life with friends and family. The convoluted works which need more research should be assigned to young trained people so that they can perform their task with newly created or formulated technologies. By teaching computers, we can give rest to our older generation.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...ds like medical, engineering, astronomy and etc., we need people who have a sharp memory...
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Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
Suggestion: etc.
...medical, engineering, telecommunication and etc. , supports the system in a much reliabl...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... engineering, telecommunication and etc. , supports the system in a much reliable ...
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Line 5, column 137, Rule ID: A_MUCH_NN1[1]
Message: Maybe you should omit the article "a", leaving only 'much'.
Suggestion: much
...ation and etc. , supports the system in a much reliable and professional way. They can...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... can give rest to our older generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, moreover, so, well, for example, in conclusion, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 7.85571142285 165% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 41.998997996 117% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 317.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87697160883 5.12529762239 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21953715646 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78285363543 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.583596214511 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.0794027098 49.4020404114 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.923076923 106.682146367 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3846153846 20.7667163134 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.46153846154 7.06120827912 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205636406981 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0739657279668 0.084324248473 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0642624543718 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126618097541 0.151304729494 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0623075891673 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 50.2224549098 111% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 12.4159519038 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.66 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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