Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some people believe that it is the responsibility of individuals to take care of their own health and diet. Others however believe that governments should make sure that their citizens have a healthy diet.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Human beings have indulged gluttony excessively over the last decades. While many people hold that authorities should have taken account of this predicament, others consider this unhealthy habit to their accountability.

It is true to say that country leaders ought to help people be mindful of their diet. Because their citizens’ mind is often full of temptation from attractive advertisements. Therefore, not only do people need governments to deter their craving from profit-target companies, but they also need to live in a healthy environment. Additionally, to earn profit efficiently with the least cost, many take advantage of chemicals to produce cheap food in low quality. And thus, the government can investigate and arrest those lawbreakers in order to shield sustainable food markets for society with legal platform and punishments.

On the other hand, people certainly need to take into account of their eating habits. Even though one may living in a healthy environment with being aware of his daily consumption, he still has a risk of having health problems, such as obesity and high blood pressure. Moreover, gluttony is extravagantly contagious with crowd effect. For instance, parents addicted to junk foods could inherit that custom to their children in the future. However, a vegetarian or traditional restaurant has a ripple effect on the area surrounding, as they offer and nurture positive seeds in people’s life. Therefore, an individual will may play a significant role in creating a long life expectancy for themselves and others.

In my perspective, people need a strong will and a healthy environment maintained by a strict government in it equally. Because I believe people’s consciousness is largely influenced by the collective energy from their community.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Message: “Because” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...d by a strict government in it equally. Because I believe people’s consciousness is lar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for instance, such as, it is true, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.3376753507 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1528.0 1615.20841683 95% => OK
No of words: 279.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.47670250896 5.12529762239 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11887276523 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.670250896057 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 465.3 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.5037196062 49.4020404114 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.866666667 106.682146367 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.4 7.06120827912 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.240666555735 0.244688304435 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716307168287 0.084324248473 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0517603829849 0.0667982634062 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138790592315 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0194651745347 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.4159519038 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 78.4519038076 111% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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