Some people believe that the world is much less safe today than it used to be. there are still many wars being fought, and high tech weapons are sold openly to any country that wants to buy them. in cities, violent crime is increasing every year. it is not a very safe world in which to bring up children. do you agree or disagree?
It is unfortunate that the world becoming less and less safe. every day in the news we read that someone has been murdered, and crime has increased in major cities all over the world. furthermore, cities are no longer safe places in which to raise children. in my opinion, the main cause of people being unkind to each other is a lack of understanding.
Mankind has always fought wars and probably always will. yet there have never been so many high-tech weapons available to many countries before. if the rich countries which supply poorer countries with these weapons understood the problems they create, arms sales would be illegal. I cannot understand why some drugs are illegal but weapons that kill thousands of people are sold everywhere.
It is said that politicians cannot be trusted to stop fighting wars. people follow their leader’s examples. in big cities, people steal from and sometimes even murder their fellow citizens. is it getting worse than it used to be? I think it is, and, furthermore, I think it will get worse in the future because we are not learning from our mistakes.
Of course, some people argue that the news services are much better these days, and therefore we hear more bad news than before. however, I disagree because my parents tell me that when they were young they could walk the streets safely at night, and people were much kinder to each other.
In conclusion, we live in a violent world. bringing up children in a world where violence is regularly shown on television shows and on the news is proof that it is not a safe place. if we do not try to solve this problem, our children’s future will suffer.
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Every
... the world becoming less and less safe. every day in the news we read that someone ha...
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Suggestion: Furthermore
...sed in major cities all over the world. furthermore, cities are no longer safe places in wh...
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Suggestion: In
...safe places in which to raise children. in my opinion, the main cause of people be...
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Suggestion: Yet
...s fought wars and probably always will. yet there have never been so many high-tech...
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Suggestion: If
...ons available to many countries before. if the rich countries which supply poorer ...
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Suggestion: People
...annot be trusted to stop fighting wars. people follow their leader’s examples. in big ...
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... people follow their leader’s examples. in big cities, people steal from and somet...
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...imes even murder their fellow citizens. is it getting worse than it used to be? I ...
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...fore we hear more bad news than before. however, I disagree because my parents tell me ...
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Suggestion: Bringing
...conclusion, we live in a violent world. bringing up children in a world where violence i...
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...s is proof that it is not a safe place. if we do not try to solve this problem, ou...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75432525952 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45852073043 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612456747405 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1297814982 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.3333333333 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0555555556 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.9879759519 376% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303189074712 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082301594318 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526461139725 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140238036268 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691210079591 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 63, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Every
... the world becoming less and less safe. every day in the news we read that someone ha...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 185, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Furthermore
...sed in major cities all over the world. furthermore, cities are no longer safe places in wh...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 1, column 259, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
...safe places in which to raise children. in my opinion, the main cause of people be...
^^
Line 3, column 58, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Yet
...s fought wars and probably always will. yet there have never been so many high-tech...
^^^
Line 3, column 146, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...ons available to many countries before. if the rich countries which supply poorer ...
^^
Line 5, column 70, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: People
...annot be trusted to stop fighting wars. people follow their leader’s examples. in big ...
^^^^^^
Line 5, column 109, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: In
... people follow their leader’s examples. in big cities, people steal from and somet...
^^
Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Is
...imes even murder their fellow citizens. is it getting worse than it used to be? I ...
^^
Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...fore we hear more bad news than before. however, I disagree because my parents tell me ...
^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 44, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Bringing
...conclusion, we live in a violent world. bringing up children in a world where violence i...
^^^^^^^^
Line 9, column 184, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...s is proof that it is not a safe place. if we do not try to solve this problem, ou...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, i think, in conclusion, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 24.0651302605 150% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 30.0 41.998997996 71% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.3376753507 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1374.0 1615.20841683 85% => OK
No of words: 289.0 315.596192385 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.75432525952 5.12529762239 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.12310562562 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45852073043 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 176.041082164 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612456747405 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 414.9 506.74238477 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 0.809619238477 494% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.1297814982 49.4020404114 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.3333333333 106.682146367 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0555555556 20.7667163134 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.22222222222 7.06120827912 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 5.01903807615 219% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 15.0 3.9879759519 376% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303189074712 0.244688304435 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.082301594318 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0526461139725 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.140238036268 0.151304729494 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0691210079591 0.056905535591 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 13.0946893788 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 50.2224549098 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.3001002004 64% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.97 12.4159519038 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.33 8.58950901804 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 78.4519038076 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.7795591182 65% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.