Some people say private schools should be banned because they give students an unfair advantage on others To what extent do you agree or disagree Give your opinion and include relevant examples from your own experience

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Some people say private schools should be banned because they give students an unfair advantage on others. To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give your opinion and include relevant examples from your own experience.

In today's competitive edge, quality education for the youth has become the necessity of any country. Schools are the source where the future of the countries are getting moulded. Many adepts assert that the private school should be banned because they give students an unfair advantage on others. My inclination discord the statement which can be supported by the possible valid arguments as follows.

Survey depicts that the condition of school and the standard of education departed in the government school are deteriorated day by day. First of all, there are very few number of government schools are available in each area that can accumulate existing population of kids of those area. Secondly, the schools are neither properly manage nor maintained officials despite of the huge allocation of fund to those schools. Thirdly, schools are lacking with the important facilities like library, computer centre, sport centre which are available in private schools for multifaceted development of students. Finally, The teachers and the teaching environment is in such a bad shape that even the parents from the mediocre family would not prefer to send their children to study in government school.

On the flip side, The increased number of private school has helped to increase the rate of literacy in many countries with the improved standard of education. However, the private schools are giving the all required facilities at uncontrollable rate of fees and admission charges which required utter attention of government. Hence, Privatization of schooling system with the proper regulatory control can help to built up a strong education system for any country. Moreover, highly internal competition of the private schools to beg more admissions for the coming years and to publicize their school in the market, schools are supporting and motivating their students to perform outstanding in every field.

By summing up all the above arguments , I dissent the idea of eradicating the private school from the education system rather suggesting privatization of education system under the control of government regulatory with strict norms in favour of bright future of any country.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...nment schools are available in each area that can accumulate existing population ...
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...e neither properly manage nor maintained officials despite of the huge allocation...
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...ich are available in private schools for multifaceted development of students F...
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Discourse Markers used:
['finally', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'moreover', 'second', 'secondly', 'so', 'third', 'thirdly', 'first of all']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.289972899729 0.247107183377 117% => OK
Verbs: 0.138211382114 0.155533422707 89% => OK
Adjectives: 0.10298102981 0.0946595960268 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.029810298103 0.0501214627716 59% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0162601626016 0.0437548338989 37% => OK
Prepositions: 0.151761517615 0.122226691241 124% => OK
Participles: 0.0514905149051 0.0403226058552 128% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.79389200661 2.80594681477 100% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0216802168022 0.0326793684256 66% => OK
Particles: 0.00542005420054 0.00163938923432 331% => OK
Determiners: 0.121951219512 0.0861772015684 142% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0135501355014 0.021408717616 63% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0162601626016 0.011925033212 136% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2214.0 1933.35771543 115% => OK
No of words: 344.0 316.048096192 109% => OK
Chars per words: 6.43604651163 6.12580529183 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.20517956788 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.456395348837 0.374742101984 122% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.343023255814 0.28420135186 121% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.247093023256 0.203846283523 121% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.15988372093 0.137316102897 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79389200661 2.80594681477 100% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.037074148 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.552325581395 0.56093040696 98% => OK
Word variations: 60.3396650718 60.7387585426 99% => OK
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0891783567 81% => OK
Sentence length: 26.4615384615 20.7743622355 127% => OK
Sentence length SD: 81.9507717723 49.517814964 165% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.307692308 127.492653851 134% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4615384615 20.7743622355 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.923076923077 0.814263465372 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38877755511 114% => OK
Language errors: 15.0 3.99599198397 375% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 60.7638640429 49.1944974215 124% => OK
Elegance: 2.67647058824 1.69124875643 158% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0889446766801 0.332605444948 27% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119232389352 0.102741220458 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0528620999848 0.0668466124924 79% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.657297002928 0.534860350844 123% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.155214801071 0.148594505496 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0587424998951 0.134430193775 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894274614558 0.0742795772207 120% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.385055361728 0.324371583561 119% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.115504502961 0.0638462369009 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0651810564327 0.228012699653 29% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0391912667511 0.058150111329 67% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.41683366733 59% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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there are very few number of government schools are available
there are very few number of government schools which are available
very few number of government schools are available

the schools are neither properly manage nor maintained
the schools are neither properly managed nor maintained

The teachers and the teaching environment is in such a bad shape
The teachers and the teaching environment are in such a bad shape

at uncontrollable rate
at an uncontrollable rate

Sentence: Hence, Privatization of schooling system with the proper regulatory control can help to built up a strong education system for any country.
Description: The token to is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to to and built

Sentence: Schools are the source where the future of the countries are getting moulded.
Error: moulded Suggestion: molded

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 7.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 343 350
No. of Characters: 1812 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.304 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.283 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.751 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 115 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 53 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.385 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.163 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.462 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.359 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.564 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.039 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5