Some people say schools should be responsible to teach young adults to look after their health, while others think this is not the responsibility of school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people say schools should be responsible to teach young adults to look after their health, while others think this is not the responsibility of school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

One decision that the people are grappling which relates to health education of youngsters. Some individuals think that schools ought to make it their responsibility to impact health knowledge to the juveniles, while others think otherwise. I absolutely believe that it should be the duty of schools to educate the young generations about their health because of the in-depth knowledge and adequate equipments that are required.

To begin with, schools often have educationists who are specialists in health sector. Clearly, a health specialist would have detailed information about most health problems which would be impacted to the young generation, perhaps, effortlessly. Not only that, researches are often conducted, and up-to-date reports are usually compiled which facilitate learning and also might keep students apprised about recent health risks. For instance, the Kapil University, Lagos just concluded a research program on respiratory disease, particularly, lungs cancer which was supervised by Professor Smith James. My point is, as a specialist, he would be able to convey the research information to youths properly.

Furthermore, educational institutions usually have adequate equipment for practical. In order to demonstrate the causes and effects of some health issues that need to be taken care of, laboratories and other facilities are required for positive results. While most schools might be capable of providing and maintaining these equipments, homes and societies may not be up to the task. To illustrate, my school, Crescent University, Enugu, has the only Anaesthesia machine in the city which is used to teach why cigarette is dangerous to health. This means, if young ones do not have access to this equipment in school, they may not know its value to health.

In conclusion, educational institutions not only provide competent teachers who impact standard knowledge to students, but also avail quality equipments which are essential for demonstration. For these reasons, I completely agree that it should be the duty of schools to teach
youths about their health.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 49, Rule ID: WHO_NOUN[1]
Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
... with, schools often have educationists who are specialists in health sector. Clearly, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 7.30460921844 205% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1795.0 1615.20841683 111% => OK
No of words: 321.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.59190031153 5.12529762239 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23278547379 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00470802245 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 184.0 176.041082164 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573208722741 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 544.5 506.74238477 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.323212914 49.4020404114 76% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.666666667 106.682146367 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.73333333333 7.06120827912 81% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.296423231703 0.244688304435 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103541439782 0.084324248473 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935299226887 0.0667982634062 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1704746029 0.151304729494 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0935675399972 0.056905535591 164% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 13.0946893788 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.14 12.4159519038 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.5 8.58950901804 111% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 78.4519038076 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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