Some people think that people should choose their job based on income in order to provide security for their family.
To what extent do you agree with this?
These days when the prices for food and clothes are growing rapidly, people have to work hard to provide for their household. For this reason, some politicians advocate that people should consider lucrative occupations if they want their family to have enough money to accommodate all needs. In this essay, I identify with their point of view.
To begin with, some sociologists state that people should base their choice of profession on their preferences. They defend their opinion with the following arguments. First of all, a favorite job can give job satisfaction. Many people build a successful career if they begin it with passion and therefore they become diligent as well as content with their work. Secondly, it usually gives them the necessary strength to overcome failures. The majority of employees, who have ever been dismissed, never abandon the idea of development in career because their dream pushes them to keep trying despite countless refusals and frustrations. For example, the former president of the Microsoft Corporation, Mr. Bill Gates, kept growing his large corporation over decades even though he faced plenty of misfortunes, since he loved programming and computers. Hence, after all things considered, it is clear that people should lay their preferences on job they are keen on.
Nevertheless, some politicians claim that people ought to look for highly-paid jobs to maintain their families. They justify their point of view with the following reasoning. The first reason is that these occupations tends to secure their families with prosperity. Today there is no abundance of lucrative jobs, so it would be foolish to neglect them only because they are not pleasant. In fact, they can transform the standards of living and give spare money to charity. Another reason is that they normally provide confidence to their family in the future. Jobs based on income can give a chance to save enough money for emergencies. For instance, if the breadwinner becomes unemployed, the family can pay their bills and get by on their savings for indefinitely until the head of family finds a new job. Thereby, after analyzing these argumentations, it is obvious that people should single out jobs based on income rather than preferences.
In conclusion, although some sociologists suggest to opt jobs on the basis of likings is the right choice, I am opposed to them and think that income overweighs all possible benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 43, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'suggest opting'.
Suggestion: suggest opting
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, look, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, after all, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, first of all, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 24.0651302605 212% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 395.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20253164557 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76611214198 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564556962025 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 506.74238477 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 16.0721442886 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.3235114846 49.4020404114 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.8571428571 106.682146367 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.7667163134 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.47619047619 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.430539852271 0.244688304435 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.133905362932 0.084324248473 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0873019836514 0.0667982634062 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.261474430992 0.151304729494 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.100917345325 0.056905535591 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.0946893788 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 50.2224549098 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 11.3001002004 91% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 12.4159519038 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 9.78957915832 72% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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