some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination but others think there are more important factors like money and personal appearance. What do you think?
I agree with Johnson that we should，first of all，define what success of life is since different people have different opinions about it. If it means a content state of mind or a positive attitude towards life, then the success of life has nothing to do with both. For example, a hermit may be satisfied with the peaceful and tranquil life in a cottage, even though he lives in a small shabby hut, has meager or no income at all to rely on for life, or even has no friends. So long as he can rest on the status quo enjoyably, life is a success for him. But if it means something like success in the material world, say earning tons of money, or elevation to higher social status, or becoming a master in one specific domain, then hard work and determination are essential.
That said, we see many cases that many people can achieve success without making much effort. For example, Wang Sicong can buy a skyscraper in New York with a click of a mouse, which for mediocre like me can equal a land on the moon. Years have also witnessed some girls who have risen to fame in the film industry with ease just because they have gorgeous looks.
Since the definition of success of life is yet to be defined, and each individual has a specific way towards success, would it be more manageable to narrow down the topic to discuss, say the commercial success of Mr. Zhu, our boss?
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, may, so, then, for example, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 16.0 24.0651302605 66% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.3376753507 36% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1127.0 1615.20841683 70% => OK
No of words: 253.0 315.596192385 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.45454545455 5.12529762239 87% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.98822939669 4.20363070211 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46697317828 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 155.0 176.041082164 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.612648221344 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 356.4 506.74238477 70% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 16.0721442886 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 52.2940404508 49.4020404114 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.222222222 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1111111111 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.55555555556 7.06120827912 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.38176352705 68% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.4128256513 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158990536353 0.244688304435 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0651532159594 0.084324248473 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.037047569343 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0969480249829 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0458820963918 0.056905535591 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.98 50.2224549098 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.8 11.3001002004 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.83 12.4159519038 71% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 47.0 78.4519038076 60% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 9.78957915832 128% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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