do you agree or disagree with the following statement? the opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. use specific reasons and exams to support your answer.
It is true that many celebrities, such as super film stars or sports megastars, are constantly employed by companies to advertise their products or are recruited by governments to advocate something beneficial to the public. I agree with the opinion that those famous people tend to exert more influence on younger people than on older people.
To begin with, older people are less exposed to the ideas of these renowned people. It is indisputable that nowadays people air their views through multimedia, such as the Internet, Twitter--an app for communication, and Wechat-- the equivalent of Twitter in China and so on. While younger people use those communication tools on a daily basis, many older people seldom get to know what the hell those gagets are, not to mention how to use them. As a result, old people are almost immune to the ideas advertised by those celebrities. Take my grandma as an example, she has no cellphone, no computer and no access to the Internet, she does not even watch TV. Therefore, when a wellknown film star appealed to people to take necessary preventive measures, such as washing hands in a strict way to help prevent Covid-19 in 2019, she just turned a deaf ear to it. She hadn't been bombarded with the public service ads on TV or anywhere else on the social media. It was impossible for her to be impacted by those ideas because she did not totally know the existence of them.
Secondly, older people are less receptive than younger people by nature. Senior people tend to think that they are experienced and that they know better than anyone else, including celebrities. A good illustration of this is a Chinese sentence I often hear from the old peopel around me, which goes like this when translated into English literally: I have crossed more bridges than all the miles you have walked. This leads to the fact that old people are often stubborn and hard-wired to the beliefs they have upheld all their lives. It is no wonder that when the national government hired a sports star to publicise a public service ads on TV to persuade citizens to adop a vegetarian diet out of environmental concerns, many old people are opposed to it because they think eating only vegetables will only make people feable and weak. They trust their own and do not listen to others.
To concude, it is reasonable to argue that older people are less influenced by the opinions of celebrities than younger people because of older people's fewer opportunities to be exposed to those ideas and because of their inborn unreceptiveness to new ideas.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, such as, as a result, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2130.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81900452489 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66910032749 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531674208145 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 678.6 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.7210953863 48.9658058833 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.294117647 100.406767564 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.47058823529 5.45110844103 100% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304014463634 0.236089414692 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106045118266 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0982751756546 0.0737576698707 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208485691377 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0410722798745 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 108.0 86.8835125448 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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